title change: Before it Turns to Ashes (formerly This Flame)

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Open Poetry #33

title change: Before it Turns to Ashes (formerly This Flame)

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2004-10-09 11:22 AM

Before it Turns to Ashes

something is burning
within me to find its way
onto the page
it is land-locked
I cannot discover
its crux
burning to be heard
I cannot ferret it
bring it to the surface
before its burning
turns to ash

it is scratching
at the lining of my soul
I seek a peaceful harbor
that will favor
my hearing
my sensing
that I may find,
may understand
what it is that cries to me
haunting my mind

surely
it is not
coffee’s drug
stirring the essence
of my conscience
fooling me into believing
I have something
worthwhile to say
in this dimly lit
dawn
bathed in autumn’s rain
and drying
slowly
in this rising sun

©October 9, 2004

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

[This message has been edited by VAS (10-10-2004 02:12 AM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2004-10-09 12:50 PM

Virginia...
You rock!

Certainly is not the coffee, nor the autumn rain, but the tender intention God put within your soul.

Always a pleasure to read you.
TD

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2004-10-10 06:01 AM

It seems to me as if the thing burning, is a dream that aches for you to raise it to intention....Like a poems words that gather in the mind, before they are written down on paper...
Whatever has caused the burning doesn't matter, what matters is is that you have put the thought of it here in poetic form, for eveyone to enjoy, as I have...

-----------ice/ford

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

3 posted 2004-10-10 06:07 AM

enjoyed the read - Roniece

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2004-10-10 08:37 AM

quote:
stirring the essence
of my conscience
fooling me into believing
I have something
worthwhile to say
in this dimly lit
dawn
bathed in autumn’s rain
and drying
slowly
in this rising sun

This is such a beauty! A wonderful moment of perception ....
You have just shown, that you were not fooled ...
And more beauty can surge from this precious moment, so charmingly described.

Love, Margherita

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