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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-10-08 06:22 PM

Dreaming Of

....and
you’re there in the dark
                      again
soft as a spirit whisper,
          waiting.
I’ve seen you, felt you
      just...         there,
pretended you were dream,
        a dream
I’d carried into waking...

....but
I feel you, feel you here
   no dream         surrounds
no dream carries the
                   presence
I see you like the remnant
         lingering
of a light too bright for eyes

....as
I nearly sense your breath
    touching          slight...
light along my skin, find a
     warmth        like
living perfume, imagined
         yet surrounding,
I know that soon, soon
      I’ll see        you
                again

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2004-10-08 08:22 PM

A beautiful dream, Jamie...very romantic!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-10-09 04:24 AM

nice format and theme...lovely write!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-10-09 08:39 AM

"like
living perfume, imagined
yet surrounding"

I especially enjoyed this line.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2004-10-10 06:26 AM

I so enjoyed this read - you have a wonderful sense of feeling when you write

Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2004-10-10 08:54 AM

Jaime~
You simply breathe the most wonderful *word-sighs*~
And ... I smile~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email [email protected]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-10-10 08:31 PM

What romantic breath blew against my face as I read this.
Powerful images.
TD

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

7 posted 2004-10-10 11:20 PM

dreamy visuals...niiice..

**babygirL**

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2004-10-11 01:48 PM

As soft as a late summer wind...
Well done, Sir.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2004-10-11 04:28 PM

The shape of this poem, like wisps of smoke, lead me into the feel of the images.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2004-10-12 10:38 AM

....as
I nearly sense your breath
    touching          slight...
light along my skin, find a
     warmth        like
living perfume, imagined
         yet surrounding,
I know that soon, soon
      I’ll see        you
                again

Just when I think you've written romance as well as it can possibly be written... I open another poem of yours and find you've kicked it up another notch. *S*
The softness and tenderness of this lends a dreamy quality to the day even as it defines yearn... It just doesn't get better... or more beautiful!!!

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