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White Peaks, Red Canyons
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White Peaks, Red Canyons |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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White Peaks, Red Canyons For all the heights of euphoria reached by fiery flames burning of closeness, one to another, so is the deepness of the valleys hollowed out by the ache of distance. And there is no common ground. For even a small stream of separation is as a sea in width and depth. Even a small dune of sand is as the Sahara in dimension. And a small sapling between the two is as a great northern forest. Only the passionate touching of skin can raise up the valley floor to the powdery white peaks of ecstasy. I have spent a lifetime in the crevices carved by streams of yearning waters. But on a few starry nights have been lifted to the brisk edges of ice topped mountains, and from there, was spectator to all the joys of life only visible from such a perspective. I can truly say that I have been higher than most, and relive these moments while riding the small streams that meander below. Yet the ache continues to carve my heart beats into the sand and my very soul into the rocks. And when my life is done, you will see my sculptures in the walls of red canyons that echo your name. Elizabeth Santos Oct. 7, 2004 |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I decided to sit on my hands and not be cheeky just this one time and just say, "Good grief lady when you get the fire within you it sure as heck is one mighty flame!" Here I thougth this was for me for a second there  Bee-oout-e-full! How was the bluegrass? |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I came for the possibilities in the title, but I stayed for the reality of the poem. This is simply beautiful, and for whatever the reason, I'm glad I came. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WOW. can I type it again? WOW. and laugh if you wanna, and I know you will, but lady, there is some steam under them thar metaphors. wow?  Tastefully done tho, painted sensuality with naught a grind of crude. If you could teach me how to do this, I would be a lady indeed! (you do that yanno, you make me wanna be nicer)  not to mention a better writer as well!  <--grumps me |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
For even a small stream of separation is as a sea in width and depth. Even a small dune of sand is as the Sahara in dimension. And a small sapling between the two is as a great northern forest. AMEN sister! Reading you is like eating a great holiday feast, the more you chew, the better it tastes, and you bring forth a buffet of simmering tea to settle the fullness of life...where remains such peace. Lovely lady, thank you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
For even a small stream of separation is as a sea in width and depth. Even a small dune of sand is as the Sahara in dimension. And a small sapling between the two is as a great northern forest. Only the passionate touching of skin can raise up the valley floor to the powdery white peaks of ecstasy. Like Lee... my first reaction was AMEN! *S* This is so very beautiful, Liz... with such a touching, heartwarming ending. *S* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Only the passionate touching of skin can raise up the valley floor to the powdery white peaks of ecstasy. ********************* And some ask me where I learn to write my imagery? Well, I tell them honestly, I learned from Elizabeth. If you recall, it was your work I studied the most when I joined this place, and this poem of yours is exactly why. Your use of metaphors, bringing the images to life until the reader can actually feel and touch them. Excellent writing as always. So much enjoyed but yours I always do. Thanks also for continuing to teach. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
After Mark's beautiful praise, do I dare tell these people that you can write these in all of what, less than 5 minutes! Lizzy ma girlfriend! You have a fire stoked in your soul, and I for one am hoping you intend to write it all out? Karen is right, that you lady, can sure up do sexy with some ladylike class You go girl!  You just get out there and show the world that older means better! (now admit it, ain't it the truth?) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, dear friend...you write the heart of many who love. What beauty of heart and spirit you share here. Thank you.  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sharon, where in the world did you find that picture of me? Mark your words touch me as do all of the comments. THank you dear friends for your kind thoughts. Liz |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This may be my favorite of all of yours that I've read...speaking of euphoria...I'm speechless with it. This is more than wonderful! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
BEAUTIFUL! |
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