Open Poetry #33 |
Who Knocks |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Who Knocks Who knocks upon my naïve door? I hear a sound of sad implore The hitching of the stage of night The wrapping of the rage of flight Go away you can’t come in My walls are made of straw to thin To keep the rage of night at bay Nor can I cage the time of day I cannot help your time to be Nor can I make you better see The path unto the evermore Has passed my house the day before It left a package of confuse Some tissue for the blow of blues A little brine to give to time The essence of a drop of prime Can’t you hear my cry of go? It echoes in my sigh of sow. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow...you live in a crack neighborhood, too, huh? Oh I felt this one, and I know it well. They don't knock much anymore...they figger I just might shoot. But you can come knocking anytime. I'll just have to e mail you the serenity code to ensure safety first, however! and a shivering g'mornin' to ya sy! Your poem runs deeper than my pithiless reply m'friend. Kinda reminded me of the Ides of March, but in October. Coffee...sigh, my curative. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sey, this one reaches deep into my thoughts and ya know, it holds some really awesome lines also. In fact, so many that I can't pick a favorite. Please just know, I think this one is one of your best ever. Hugs and good morning, wavin over my coffee cup here.... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Bolt the door Sy. Wonderfully written. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my Sy... This one leaves much for me to think about. I had better pour myself another cup and go back for another read. Well done m'friend. ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Good morning, Sy! Are you trying to wake or shake me up? Such melancholy to weigh on wings of our wise owl! You know that owls make their way through the forest soundless because of the lightweight structure of those wings. Glad you lightened the load here and are ready for take off! Have a wonderful day. (I hope the sun is shining out there as nicely as it is here...) Nice to visit again... miscellanea |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello Seymour. A very serious-minded poem today, my friend. It makes a person ponder their thoughts. As always, I love your rhyme, dear Sir. Hugs, Ethel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Poe would be jealous, my friend. *S* This is excellent work!!! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Send me the code. LOL Love ya sweet. Gentle, You get extra hugs for this reply. scorpio It's not the door they use. LOL Nancy, I can use an extra cup myself, LOL. miscellanea Not to worry, just slipped on a banana peel, LOL Ethel, As always I love your comments. suthern What a beautiful comment. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lol @ serenity this poem was a little sad to me, and I got a mood from it, but then I read Karen's comment and couldn't help but crack up good write Sy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, So glad you stopped bye. Don't mind me the mood comes and goes. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hiya and Good Morning I think those particular moods should give freely to voice, in a caring way Your a charm that jingles warmth and wise sparkles |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ Thank you sweet and a very good morning to you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, my, Sweet Sy, your door be not "naive". Nor do I believe that your walls to be made of straw and thin. You are wise and your walls and will are strong, oh mighty sonneteer! The path to evermore returns and shows you the way of Light and happiness! You have no need for tissues, my friend. All is well and I send you lots of angel comfort. EA |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Was it Barnacle Bill the Sailor?..(do you remember that old song sy?)...LongJohn?..I hear ya knocking,,,but ya can't come in?...I know you're old enough to know these.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel Thank you sweet, not to worry I'll be writing again soon. Toe, Yea and a few more you didn't mention. Take care. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I sure wish you were onto something Sy, if we could ONLY get them to knock that would make it so much easier wouldn't it? There is not a poem goes by I don't learn to think about things a bit differently than I did through that bright Sy eyes, and soul. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon, |
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