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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2004-10-06 11:33 PM

One wish fluted pink within its shimmer
Clean and new intoxication’s gentle glimmer
Bathing blood in opal clouds
Delight expounds desires simmer

White the Johnny jump up carpet blooms
Sensitive the thin skinned crocus swoons
This once, succumbed a feeling in a solar breath
Making note the way to wear my heart yet scared to death

And laughter’s echo trims the deep green romp
Summoning in hidden thicket, flourishing in moistened swamp
The air grows thin, dizzied out then in
Lemon reasons marigold treasons starch and stomp

In silken looks upon the opiate of summer’s flower
Bending to the touch so slowly motioned every hour
Tenderly exploring just beneath the lace of white
Beaming to perfection every charter taken flight

Sweet the afterglow of gardens given name
Crystal clear the colors deepen given wild to tame
Lily brushed the canvas plays your body of a splendid light
Appeals my eyes the satin blue of every star struck night

Copyright Kkh 10/06/04

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-10-07 02:27 AM

"The air grows thin, dizzied out then in
Lemon reasons marigold treasons starch and stomp"
I like the whole poem, but that was my favorite. Nice imagery, interesting ponderings.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2004-10-07 09:00 PM

I am clueless where you come up with such
descriptive lines, so much imagery, a
most vivid painting...nicely done kiddo.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2004-10-07 09:17 PM

Kathleen~

'One wish fluted pink within its shimmer'

You opened with a 'killer' line ... and it just got better and better~
Your word-palette is rich with the colors of romantic thoughts dear poetess~

*sigh*
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2004-10-07 10:32 PM

Kathleen, I know I've told you many times,
but I do love your writing, Lady. Your
poems are always written with perfection.

Hugs,
Ethel

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2004-10-08 07:43 AM

you've painted lovely emotions here
all good ones...

thank you!

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

6 posted 2004-10-08 08:44 AM

Now this is poetry. Unique expressions loaded down in some really awesome lines.
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"One wish fluted pink within its shimmer"

"White the Johnny jump up carpet blooms
Sensitive the thin skinned crocus swoons"

"This once, succumbed a feeling in a solar breath"

"Lemon reasons marigold treasons starch and stomp"

"Lily brushed the canvas plays your body of a splendid light
Appeals my eyes the satin blue of every star struck night"
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Love the metaphors, the use of nature to express your thoughts, and with lemons and marigolds, how could one miss. Lot's of emotion and you could almost feel the passion in this write. Loved it and well worth the read.

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