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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-10-06 08:57 PM

You will come to me
in the starkness of
a winter night,

the somber moon
dividing herself
between the shadows
of the barren trees,

and i will stand naked among them,

unmasked, baring all
beneath your eyes of desire,

as i will have counted
a trilogy of circular moons,

i will give myself to you then
lovingly, without reservation,

as the branches beg
the descending darkness
to cradle their extremities,

i will play your whore
as i meet your eyes,

and stand shamelessly before you
devoid of all earthly trappings,
longing to be honored by your approval,
praying you find me virginal.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-10-06 09:09 PM

ah, a sacrifice to love

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

2 posted 2004-10-08 09:23 AM

The moons can make us all feel a little circular at times. But seriously, the write had that feel, like intentionally placing aside everything, but those inner desires. We all have them and we all WANT to let them loose...nice writing here.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2004-10-08 09:34 AM

ah yes....to give ourselves with unabandon...and I love the way you tied this all together with earth elements...

very well done inkey...

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2004-10-08 01:17 PM

This is so heavenly and virginal in itself Michele . . .

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-10-08 02:43 PM

to taste the gift of acceptance of the raw of ourselves - even if by ourselves

you write with magic quill and spell binding words -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-10-09 12:54 PM

The heat of autumn, a subliminal melt of inhabitions...just as the seasons drop their clothes, so too, does the self drop it's shields.

Wonderful write.
TD

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-10-09 01:43 PM

very sensual

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2004-10-09 07:27 PM

Dear Michele, oh ... while typing in the reply box I notice your observation for the Critiques, it says "I'm just a shy girl - please be gentle"!

There is such charm in mixing shyness and passion. This touching piece shows this so eloquently!

You write with great poetic power. No shyness here.

Love and hugs. Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2004-10-09 08:54 PM

thanks for much for the feedback and the support and your insightful comments

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

10 posted 2004-10-10 09:23 AM

the pale flesh of a
   single naked rose
      buried within its
         bush of thorns ...


   These words left my skin prickling as I awake.

PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

11 posted 2004-10-14 03:18 PM

Nice job....the eroticism flows like a river here...

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