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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I know that loss can't be evaded But oh, if it could be persuaded To not dally It is the fear of what shall be That steals my breath and crushes me. I'll not rally From existence of waking scream, I'm all nightmare without a dream As I watch you - Loving, wishing, worrying Knowing there is not a thing That I can do to halt your going |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Nicely done Miz suthern |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
 Maree  cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Tragically beautiful. Very powerful. A poem that I truly appreciate. A keeper. Warm regards, Kevin |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad but good |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
sad, but a nice way to let it out |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very impactful and very good. Nice to see you still have ink in your pen. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Oh yes...Suthern at her usual best..... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I was reading in here earlier and saw a gracious reply of yours to another poet...something about not being afraid to write the "tough ones" outside our "comfort zone"...the ones that may not "rest easy" on the reader... I think the same praise applies to you as well...life isnt all happy rhymes and so ones poetry cant always be. Write your heart and the rhymes will ring true. And as we write, hopefully we heal in the process. To not dally It is the fear of what shall be That steals my breath and crushes me. I'll not rally From existence of waking scream, I'm all nightmare without a dream poignant, powerful, honest heart write poetess Ruth. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern An excellent write, perhaps some things are not meant to be.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
There can be overwhelming pain, fear, and frustration at our inability to put off the inevitable. May God grace us with the peace of acceptance. This is an exceptionally moving write and one that many of your readers are sure to feel deeply. Loving, healing hugs to both you and the one for whom this was written. EA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetestSuthernGal~ There is that very, very helplessness that we are all so vulnerable to~ Wishing ... yet knowing ... we cannot turn the tides .... so we pray, we cry, we scream, and we write~ *Huglets* you dear poetess~ ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Suthern, this makes me ache....gawd gal...... you have written poignancy so very well... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, Laura, what an ache of a poem this is....in so many ways it's a shame that you are our resident expert on this subject....but in one way -- the writing -- it's something else again. You are proof that there's at least one good thing which can come from sadness....words like these. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
...ah, been there done that, well written! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh this just aches! Well done...well done indeed. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Suthern, this poem hurts a great amount. I too hope it does not dally...and that a fresh breath of air comes to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
wranx: Thank you so much, kind sir. *S* DA: Thank you. *S* Hugs are greatly appreciated. *S* Kevo: When anyone calls a poem of mine a keeper, I'm both grateful and humbled... thank you!!! PS: Thank you, sweet lady. *S* pandonov: Thank you very much! *S* Mark: And there are always pencils. LOL Thank you! *S* Toerag: Thank you, my friend. *S* JM: You know what your response means to me... but this I say again... thank you... so very much. *S* Seymour: And some things are... whether we want them or not. *S* Thank you so much. *S* EA: Amen to that pain, fear and frustration. *S* Thank you so very much, my friend... *S* Marge: And sometimes we do them simultaneously. *S* Thank you very much, kind lady. *S* GS: Thank you so much... I wish I could ease all our aches. *S* Ratleader: It seems I'm going to HAVE to find some helium to lighten my pen. LOL Thank you so much, my friend... for both your acceptance of these words and the wakeup call on wallowing. *S* hoot: Thank you very much! *S* Enchantress: Thank you, kind lady... so much. *S* Magnus: I do, too. *S* Thank you... both this and your email are greatly appreciated. *S* |
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