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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Autumn's chilled breath as my shroud, I pulled my collar closer to my neck, watching the clouds dance across the last blue sky I shall see this season. Craning my neck, ever so slightly to the right, then the left, I sighed. No one is out tonight. Dampness herself was creeping up the backs of my thighs, my toes already numbed. This is when I saw it. The leviathan. The most beautiful sight I can remember. And it just stood there for me. As if the Great Goddess herself decided that I needed a smile. And I did. Smile, that is. Then stepped into my doorway, now lit by the onset of night. A grin still plastered upon my face. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is one of those, that make me want to yell out, "keep the story going!" don't stop there....  like it... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this! Fantastic write.. and Susan is right...there should be more!!! Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I thought I saw Leviathan once but it turned out to be my reflection, time to diet.. this material is gold, gold |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Smile, that is. Then stepped into my doorway, now lit by the onset of night. we goddesses do have a way of doing that, don't we? smiling with you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
aww Sea thank you so much ( there is no more *yikes!) Nancy, thank you so much. Raph, make that two of us, I expect to see myself in that Ripleys Musuem soon. *grin* Thank you Why yes we do. Michele, thank you. Thanks guys. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The most beautiful sight I can remember. And through your words... you let us see, too. *S* Thank you for this! *S* |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
I agree with Sea, I did not want this one to end on such an early line. Please pick it up sometime, and carry us further along the enchanting journey! Hugs, Rf |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A fine day for playing "what am I?" with clouds. Yep...A fine fat beasty of a cloud! and so lite on his feet too! lol |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Writing on your sights and sounds are always worth reading Sue...thank you.. Goldenrose. The supreme happiness in life is the conviction that we are loved. Victor Hugo. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Bravo.....this was a marvelous study and conclusion of accepting a gift which was given to you especially...and for whatever reason, you accepted and allowed... Tremendous virtue you own, hugs...loved this emensely...gosh darn wish I could spell...hehehehe |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you suthern so much Thanks Robert, a story, eh? Ed *smile* it sure was, i was going to write you off it, but you wrote your own! Thank you Phil, that was sweet. Lee? Thank you . . I did accept it, gladly. Thanks guys. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sue I get the feeling anytime you step outside we will be blessed with more.... yep, I just get that feeling... the words are in you and when they come out? PURE MAGIC!!!!!!!  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"And it just stood there for me. As if the Great Goddess herself decided that I needed a smile." Don't we all! Beautiful!!!! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
In my book cirrus beats stratus any old day....those may have more water in them, but flat gray sucks after a while. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello, LittleOne  Thanks for making me feel what you saw. Beautiful. Hugs, Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Knowing you and how you are lovely sue, this is an enticing visual: "Craning my neck, ever so slightly to the right, then the left, I sighed. No one is out tonight." Remember Rickie Lee Jones? Her first album? Dig deep and find an acapella called "Eight Bars Before Midnight" "All the gang, has gone home I'm standing on the corner, all alone. You and me, streetlight, we'll paint the town gray" smiling...I cannot find the lyrics to this well worth the dig elusive track either. "Say goodnight, America all the world still loves a dreamer..." *tossing roses at you* Cirrus gazer and I wish I had this song to send. Rickie Lee...check her out. k? Massive star burning here, they match twins. http://www.londonstudent.org.uk/3issue/music/rleejones.htm Hugs m'lady. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Donna, that was so sweet of you to say, I tend to write about nature a lot. It soothes me. Yes! Icey . . . thank you so much for that. Now James, you had me on a google cloud search after your reply *smile* I was thinking, My God did I use the right type of cloud! Thank you Hey Ethel, long time, no read. I miss you . . . you are most welcome thank you. K, you know I am searching for that tune right now . . . (thank you for your words, so very sweet). Cirrus gazer . . . I like that . . . and after reading that link, thank you for that btw, you mean to tell me Sheryl Crow didnt actually WRITE that tune that made her so famous (dont get me started) but did a cover of Rickie? (grrr) You, m'Lady are lovely yourself . . . Thanks guys and thank you K for always seeing what I see. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
you have a lot of beautiful imagery in this poem, i like the personification of the elements too. i really got into this poem, such perfect timing too... Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
This is just wonderful .... gosh, I feel like others, wish there was more. hugs and smiles, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a starchilled smile up in Lake Bison sweet |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Well, dear Sue, that smile of yours indeed makes you a true lover of the beauty you behold. I know that smile. Cirrus is fascinating, up there and in your poem. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
lw .... cool write lilwing , i had the goosebumps reading it lol, your awesome babe hugs : ) , James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Cool imagery here Sue. I look forward to reading more by you Maree  cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks Matt! Where have you been? aww Marti, thank you - I wish there were more too, I could make a lotta moolah doing that *smile* Yes, Bri (Lake Bison), you nut! Thank you Margherita, nothing is more beautiful than your words . . . thank you Thanks James . . I gave YOU the goosebumps??? That's something new . . . *grin* Thank you so much Maree, truly  |
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