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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-10-04 08:17 AM





when you ride there
godiva and her charms
and you cut your hair too

you say anyone can gallop
and ride at night
but a slow walk

in middle day time
down my busy street
with the crowds of me around

do I like the view
and do you look the same
as when you were but a dream

when I wondered at your eyes


_______________

Dark


scribblenote; lovely is more lovely when it is
glass with day touch, open and willing to be
fragile, when it says, this is me..


© Copyright 2004 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-10-04 08:28 AM


When truth is revealed
in its innocence,
there is nothing lovlier.

As is this piece.

Good morning, Sir...

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-10-04 08:29 AM


you say anyone can gallop
and ride at night
but a slow walk

in middle day time
down my busy street
with the crowds of me around


I love where you take me MrD

M

cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-10-04 08:50 AM


anyone can do the can can!

hehe...written with marvelous inginuity, as always...

Good Morning sir
and Happy Monday

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-10-04 09:31 AM


Yes..open and honest view.
Much enjoyed sir D.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
5 posted 2004-10-04 10:06 AM


Words of compassion and acceptance, of tender finger touches to heart - most lovely this.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
6 posted 2004-10-04 08:00 PM


what a wonderful way to say something usually said so routinely
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
7 posted 2004-10-04 08:21 PM


DS

It is good to see the light in someone's eyes, wheather it is moonlight or sunlight.  Your poem is touching.  

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
8 posted 2004-10-04 08:40 PM


to the very soul, indeed.
Beautiful.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
9 posted 2004-10-05 12:45 PM


Enjoyed...James
SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
10 posted 2004-10-05 12:52 PM


"do I like the view
and do you look the same
as when you were but a dream

when I wondered at your eyes"

you make soft, floaty sighs

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