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(duet w/ Dark Angel)
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(duet w/ Dark Angel) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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she forces seasons an autumn of sleeping dogs a howling of oval mouths seething heart, i no longer mourn the moons that fall between us still, driftwood combs the shore and in my breast a watermark where she and promises broke © Maree Russo & Raphael Giuffrida |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"i no longer mourn the moons that fall between us still," oh this is fantastic you two! lovin it...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is the most beautiful writing I have seen, joined, in a very long time. The both of you must write more often together . . . this is flawless. A stinging beauty . . . |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
A very fine write. I enjoyed the combined talent. CB 8) |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i no longer mourn the moons that fall between us ******************************************* o to be able to not count those moons any more very tight, very right write...yes!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is like listening to a soft echo across the miles, across the oceans, a duet of hearts in harmony underneath the same moon. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
i no longer mourn the moons that fall between us still, driftwood combs the shore and in my breast a watermark A wonderful co-creation! Bentornato Raffaele! Love, Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree and Raph I Enjoyed the emotive pull of this poem...great duet!!  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks everyone, and of course a special thanks to Maree for her patience with my temperamental muse. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I really enjoyed this - I love the visuals you used - you two did a great job! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thanks everyone for your kind replies, and Bells? thank you for putting up with my set-in-her-ways muse LOL. Me love to du-et with you again  cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This just overwhelming sadness and yet somehow there is an underlying tone of "no regrets." You two duet beautifully. Thanks for letting me watch.  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Powerful stuff....when two of PIP's strongest voices combine, it's going to be what they call a poetic experience! |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
great work both of you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Painfully beautiful. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
how lovely |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I knew this would be a good mix... and I wasn't disappointed! *S* Well done! *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Stand up and take a bow for a very fine collaborative effort! Impressive! EA |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
HUGE APPLAUSE you guys are awesome!!!!!! keeping this and hugging both of you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
she forces seasons an autumn of sleeping dogs a howling of oval mouths ~~~ i no longer mourn the moons that fall between us ~~~~~ driftwood combs the shore and in my breast a watermark where she and promises broke ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh man....... you guys........ this is the coolest poem.... I read it the other day and have come back to it several times.... the imagery and personification rocks... the succinct impact of its emote is awesome... you knew just what to say..and just when to let it be enough said. this is a IWIHWT!!!!! DUET again... many times...pleeeeeze |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks again everyone, and yes i look forward to writing with maree again, as soon as I remember how to write |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Bello, I'vve got my thinking caps on..(back to front perhaps) lol Sheesh, it's very loud and mumbled in there, (maree slaps head)  looking forward to it Bells cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very nice! Cohesive and Complete. I could read another one. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
excellent collab...seamless...lovley... **babygirL** |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
so sad...but well done duet |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
poignantly beautiful duet you two! Excellent job. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
splendid write |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
yeah back for more greedy me |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
me too, for those of us that have not seen such beauty. |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
driftwood combs the shore and in my breast a watermark where she and promises broke ~*~ absolutely seamless... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice duet |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This really was excellent yall....good job.. |
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