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Midnitesun

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Gaia

0 posted 2004-09-28 01:00 AM

As fragrant flowers fell
upon the floor

she slipped silently
through the darkened room’s door

no need to whisper
for no one was there save the wind

we all know about Mariah
and why we never call out her name

no one to blame except the self
who would not play the game

and passionate petals fall without echo
while the heart beats the same

as fragrant flowers fall
upon the cold floor.

muted

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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

1 posted 2004-09-28 03:46 AM

I dont know where this comes from, but i know im feeling it ache me deep inside.

kayjay
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2 posted 2004-09-28 09:32 AM

Now this one is a thinker! (And it is sooo early in my day) I think lots of interpretations are possible, from a lost love to hurricane fear. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

miscellanea
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OH

3 posted 2004-09-28 09:48 AM

I agree with the others; this does have a little haunting mystery to it. It's very pretty and easy to visualize the fallen petals...
miscellanea

Midnitesun

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Gaia

4 posted 2004-09-28 10:10 AM

*sigh*
Yes, Mariah is the haunting chill wind of lost love, lost opportunities.
Ken, I never really thought about a hurricane scene, but see how it could be interpreted as such. Now that would put a different 'twist' on this.

DavePage
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5 posted 2004-09-28 10:17 AM

Very different, haunting

Dave

LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-09-28 10:29 AM

ahhhh, but perhaps nothing at all was lost in the end, but specifically the fingers of fate, walking towards a better tomorrow???

Good read, thank you

Margherita
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7 posted 2004-09-28 12:26 PM

I could see the scene ..... falling petals have always a feeling of loss accompanying them.

Passing beauty ....

Beautiful write.
Love, Margherita

Midnitesun

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Gaia

8 posted 2004-09-28 12:28 PM

Dave, Lee, Margherita...thanking you for your moment.
Thanks, M, for letting me know you could see this scene.

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2004-09-28 02:56 PM

and passionate petals fall without echo
while the heart beats the same

as fragrant flowers fall
upon the cold floor.

Kacy, this is indeed hauntingly beautiful, and thanks for the explanation on Mariah, as I've never heard of this before. Very well done. Those above lines are beautiful!

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

kayjay
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10 posted 2004-09-28 06:12 PM

One could also think of "They call the wind Mariah" from Paint Your Wagon, also sung by the Kingston Trio many years ago. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Midnitesun

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Gaia

11 posted 2004-09-28 06:27 PM

My dad used to sing that all the time, it was one of his favorites. I always think of that song when I hear the name Mariah, or hear howling winds. And it seems to me, it's always been tied metaphorically to a sense of loss/loneliness.

littlewing
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12 posted 2004-09-29 12:42 PM

Kacy:

this is hauntingly beautiful.

I love to see this from you
(the writing - not the feeling)

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2004-09-29 11:39 PM

an aching haunting....I could see the petals falling on the cold floor....

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

14 posted 2004-09-30 02:17 AM

Tis a wind of that 1st love, a wind of that race we didn't run, a wind to all those destinations that we chose to ignore. Very nice write and now you got me wanting to find a horse, saddle it up, and race the wind from here to eternity.

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no one to blame except the self
who would not play the game
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much more in the above than just a simple thought that made it to the blue pages.

Again, very much enjoyed the read.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

15 posted 2004-09-30 03:07 AM

Sus, Lauren, thanking you, sweet poet sisters, for letting this wind spirit howl a bit.

Mark, guess I'm busted? LOL, so now I'm visualizing you in 3D, riding off into the distance, lassoing a magnificent rainbow that's sitting on top of the next hill.

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