"I Don't Want To Hold You Back"

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Open Poetry #33

"I Don't Want To Hold You Back"

Lucie
Senior Member

since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

0 posted 2004-07-12 03:33 PM

You said, "I don't want to hold you back."
You think that your being noble..let me tell you.

Until the time, my time is through.
My heart will go on loving you.
You hold me back.

Until the earth revolves no more.
And time becomes the time before.
You hold me back.

Until my heart and body cease.
From you, for me, there's no release.
You hold me back.

Until the stars all burst in flame.
My love for you will be the same.
You hold me back.

The moment that you touched my life.
The minute I became your wife.
You hold me back.

In my dreams, my love is freed.
From you I get just what I need.

....................You hold me back.

Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-07-12 03:38 PM

Oh, Lucie, this is gooooood!

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

2 posted 2004-07-13 09:23 AM

Luce...ya haven't lost a thing in your long absence...how ya been gal?

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-07-13 09:26 AM

wonderful

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

4 posted 2004-07-13 09:41 AM

Good to see you home again, Lucie...
as for one holding another back?
Only by one's approval...right?

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

5 posted 2004-07-13 10:16 AM

Oh how I wish I'd come up with this! Beautiful, just beautiful.

~~J

zenny
Member

since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

6 posted 2004-07-13 10:25 AM

Lovely

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-07-13 12:17 PM

Great rhythm, like a heartfelt song. Great write.

JL

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-07-13 12:27 PM

gawd! I can relate SO well to this!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2004-07-14 01:11 PM

This is so beautiful... and it's so great to see you posting again! *S*

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

10 posted 2004-07-14 03:25 PM

Oh this is a song! I love the construction and the way you play on the words, 'you hold me back' !

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2004-07-15 02:53 AM

Nice writing...James

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