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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-09-26 01:37 PM


The words I was looking for I can't find,

A focus on drafts of sky.

Clouds gray swarming my thoughts with dreams of misunderstanding
Patterns that I belong to but can not reach
Fast roaring black expressions spinning the white to gray
Torrents of power failing understanding
Understanding outcasting my mind
Sound colour words misunderstandings
Soul gathered pain tempting tempestuous skies for understanding

Cloud grey swarming firey pestulant answer
Telling me what
That I am mortal
That I can not commune with nature
That I can commune with my sex
That in your eyes and strengh
I am impotent

Swirling spining sucking you down
Forcing you up sky fractured
Death for those with pleasure
Preservation for those who do not wish it
Living when nothing else matters
Ice freezing to fire
No-one said it had to freeze to reason
As all civilisations
It freezes to out

Cupping your thoughts within your mindscheme of life
Edging your will to blue skies that never happen
A peace touched with darkness echoing your regret
That having given all
What did you get
For your pleasure control palace

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1 posted 2004-09-26 08:35 PM


Dave, you write from the depths of a soul that searches constantly. May you find that spot within your life and heart that makes sense of it all.
I'm still searching, too, and perhaps, that IS what it's all about.
Hope this makes sense. LOL.


"Patterns that I belong to but can not reach"

understanding this

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2 posted 2004-09-26 08:53 PM


I watched the clouds and yes but I found my soul back in the 50s

Dave

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3 posted 2004-09-26 09:09 PM


One thing is sure we both write from the depths of our souls...can see some soul searching here...good to read, keep up the work


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4 posted 2004-09-27 01:01 PM


Thanks

Another of my attempts to make something into a polished and changed set of words but still prefer the original


dave

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