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tenor sax (a duet by greeneyes and serenity)
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tenor sax (a duet by greeneyes and serenity) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I met my soul in shadowing there are darker differences I'm sure that she was unaware shading dawn to certainties mingled in that musk of trust I never found it true -- I thought that the risk of all is blue taught the stay of ought is hue maybe shape of a delay blooming in the rhyme today as if I had not said enough... Longing to be stilled I am spilling some brief fill of joy I wanted to just open up my mouth and speak and yet I want...I want. I greet wings on petals velt laying bare on dreams I sang naked as the velveteen where they will fall left again under sheets of black I grin and times don't change times don't change precise breathing of this heart quietly unpeeling me the sea will touch the forests green from a distant gathering moss in cling moss of rock in a blue bed blanket bled of ashes as the sky will rise gather over silences and bumps of hairs of my despise itching like a day in dew gathering the grasses new in a tenor of a sax... whispering the blues to you in your ear at dawn I am the high note of a pink sun ray. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (09-26-2004 05:23 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
in the rhyme today as if I had not said enough... Longing to be filled I am spilling ~*~ Oh... ~*~ and times don't change times don't change precise breathing of this heart quietly ~*~ Oh........ ~*~ the sky will rise gather over silences and bumps of hairs of my despise itching like a day in dew gathering the grasses new in a tenor of a sax... whispering the blues to you in your ear at dawn I am the high note of a pink sun ray. ~*~ I have had a very extreme weekend...they always are when we hostess a state weekend for our legal professional group...so it may be that I am tired, but it may be that this poem...is my song. And for that, my two lovely ladies, I thank you, applaud you, and  you. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What an excellent write you two. Much Applause...strong, clear and vibrant. TD |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
w h i s p e r i n g wow! Thank you ladies for this fabulous duet. I'm keeping it Maree  Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
 you two sing sweet music with this. Bravo. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
and what a most beautiful melody it is . . . I think you guys are shinin' through my window . . . *smile* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Symbols of gossomar, dancing in the moon light, perfuming with dew, to find the passions of the you. Sheer eligance. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Seamless, is the word that comes to mind. Excellent write you two!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lyrical, melodious, mellifluous... Yeppers, you two sing well together!  Linda |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sunshine~ Such a sweet compliment -- thank you Lady for taking time to read....  ~~ ThisDiamond~ Hugssss for the sweet applause, thank you! ~~ Dark Angel~ whispering back how much I appreciate you words... ~~ Susan~ thanks kindly, the music came easy with inspiration.... ~~ Sue~ luv ya....  and thank you....~~ SY~ lovely words from such a gentle person, thank you ~~ Duncan~ flawless too... thank you... ~~ Linda~ hugssss lady angel....thank you for stopping by ... ~~ Karen Thank you--you are inspiration to the soul .... hugsss you~~*~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and Lauren? Thank you--folks, she is just one of the most talented and gracious ladies of Pip. Thank you for tolerating me Greeneyes. You are truly a classy poet. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I met my soul in shadowing there are darker differences I'm sure that she was unaware shading dawn to certainties mingled in that musk of trust I never found it true -- I thought that the risk of all is blue taught the stay of ought is hue maybe shape of a delay blooming in the rhyme today as if I had not said enough... Longing to be stilled I am spilling some brief fill of joy I wanted to just open up my mouth and speak and yet I want...I want. I greet wings on petals velt laying bare on dreams I sang naked as the velveteen where they will fall left again under sheets of black I grin and times don't change times don't change precise breathing of this heart quietly unpeeling me the sea will touch the forests green from a distant gathering moss in cling moss of rock in a blue bed blanket bled of ashes as the sky will rise gather over silences and bumps of hairs of my despise itching like a day in dew gathering the grasses new in a tenor of a sax... whispering the blues to you in your ear at dawn I am the high note of a pink sun ray. ===================================== I may be the tardiest moth ever... but I wasnt about to miss a word of this... two of me favorite girlies duet... NO WAY the moth wasnt gonna fly in this pretty blue flame.  lovely lovely me lovies. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
dream duet, too of my favourites coming together |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ladies....  This is talent, and you BOTH are extremely classy writers, and people in my book.... When I pick my jaw up I will be back to read this again.. damn gals........this is fantabulous! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now I say we just wait for the evening fog to roll in and dance on grass floor to the high notes of misted desires. Excellent writing you two, but then again, how could it not be. You take two of the most talented visionaries in here and strap their pens together, you get golden ink and this one shines Platinum. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a wonderful strutting blow you two snap |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A lovely Tremor sax! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yea, I've sounded like a tenor when having sex sometimes too...oh wait...you said sax, never mind...but liked the write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"tenor sex" click, click, click, click..... oh. "tenor sax" my bad. seriously...great writing...I am saving this. I especially loved the first two lines..they grabbed me with their meaning. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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