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IndigoEve
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Etched in the illusion of time

0 posted 2004-09-22 10:08 PM


To my brother
~toujours


.::.

Nostalgia is more disease than feeling...
after all, you cannot cure the past.

There are words on pages,
and pages of confessions
make the scandal deliriously pour
down our backs.
She tore your sins along neatly perforated lines
touching off a simplicity that a mere
voice can create,
like
a memory, dried and aching.

I watched from the window.

Remembered.
I spent twenty eight hours of my life in hell for you.
For this!

Causticity carves contemplative prayers.
To bring a blasphemy into the world.
Like the thinnest paper cut, along your
hand's natural horizon slants.
They send shocking color through the
pulsing temple sounds.

Put my fingers to your forehead.
Hushhh, please.
Our eyes are down.

She'll never love you, I whispered into the flaking air.
Never love your vanity,
the iniquity.

~
It has been one dissected century
since a feather quill burnt us,
the race of veins along a paling
comparison of sensibility

Sense and
tenuous oxymoron:
There is handwriting beneath your skin.
My script forged its chinese curvatures
a deadly delicacy,
shut between fraying, yellowed pages.
She strokes the spine violently,
before turning away, blind.
~

Illusion hung in that summer air like
the swollen vines do with tomorrow's wine.
We are aged by a season,
as I held your photograph between
my bleeding fingers.

When confessions burgeon such recompense,
for the truths we never lied.




If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

© Copyright 2004 Imbued - All Rights Reserved
Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind
1 posted 2004-09-22 11:07 PM


I am speechless each and everytime I read you wishing I had words, any words to do this justice...amazed at the talent that unfolds!

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2004-09-23 12:43 PM


such amazing and raw talent, never stop writing
Alicia
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3 posted 2004-09-23 09:28 PM


i could dissect this into a thousand bitty poems, nearly every line one in themselves.
will surely be reread for further discovery and comprehension but had to comment on your wording and gosh, i found myself so in love with so many of the lines that i could hardly wait to uncover the next and so would skip ahead and come back. (does none of this make sense?) -

Martie
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4 posted 2004-09-23 10:11 PM


Indigo

Amazing outpouring, emotional and difficult to reply to with the right words.  

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-10-17 11:43 PM


WOW yes.... pleaseeeee never stop writing.

I echo all of the above and I thank Raph for directing me here.






cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

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Gaia
6 posted 2004-10-18 12:10 PM


"Nostalgia is more disease than feeling...
after all, you cannot cure the past."

Absorbing this one. So much to hold onto, within each drop of ink.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
7 posted 2004-10-18 12:21 PM


Man, can you ever write!!!

Love & Light,
EA

wranx
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8 posted 2004-10-18 12:37 PM


Nice, very nice indeed!
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9 posted 2004-10-18 01:30 AM


Poetic perfection, and can't pick a line or I would be posting your entire poem, beautiful!
babygirlwlove
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10 posted 2004-10-18 06:28 AM


Indigo Eve...

I think I felt every breath behind every syllable in this...truly an outstanding poem from a technical perspective...and a deeply stirring poem, from an emotional perspective..as we watch you bleed onto the page.

**babygirL**

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11 posted 2004-10-18 09:50 AM


IndigoEve~

'She tore your sins along neatly perforated lines
touching off a simplicity that a mere
voice can create,
like
a memory, dried and aching.

I watched from the window.'


THIS is some mighty fine penning, dear poetess~

You've talent GALORE !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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