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We the People |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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We a pronoun meaning us the people let's just make that clear We the people not dogs or such nor mammals of intelligence dolphins and the platypus but no, the people just like us in order order makes the trust to form (to make more perfect than?) a union formed by minuteman a marriage that was better than the one we failed before. (can I type those words again?) a union that was better than history granted us in whims of kings and rings democracy a perfect union, but more so. I'm baffled by the endlessness of what it all implies. This implies there was one less. That implies there could be more. How much perfect more could be than words they chose as creed? I see. Or am I too persnickety regarding English of the Queen limiting the dream concede by mere propriety I think I hold that sacred promises that I will try my hand at thus "establish Justice" --retrospect. insure the trust I genuflect at ballgames hand on heart attest swearing I will make a start of a new me born again if only we can win, please, God. Fireworks and confetti sure can make a mess of things of finances and tangledness of doctors, lawyers, injun chiefs... domestic meaning home or tame--the game? Or does it mean the same lame nod of the cow at graze-- have I grown fat or am I crazed from gazing at the other side of the fence, it's just as green. tranquility or a drugged haze of instant grati-vacation and neighbors are a nice tall fence nod hello as self defense 'cause we don't wanna piss them off and open cans of worms we can't begin to even count. provide! a word I understand a mammoth mammary of gland that suckles all insistancy of the greed of you and me and the offspring of us all for the common same? defense of what? are we afraid? defense implies an offense (do we lack?) damn--I never felt a slap of the glove of gentleman but what do I know finances? as I drink the wine sustained provided by this majesty if sometimes slight imagined. See? Are we just bored with what we be? Or do we just want more? let's see... Promote emote and wave the flag by God I love it too I do I've had enough of burning hues red is blood and white is blue burning to her purity stars I see the whore in me licking whey from ladle saved by government in subsidy dying poor too fat for grave they burn us by the pound and sound the trumpets of the lessons vexed the general welfare... I guess it's where I'm most confused and I'm left battered by the truth tell me what this means to you for surely it bemuses me -- Which one of you can I believe? secure (OH yes--just vote for me.) the blessings of (our) Liberty (define it please) to ourselves (and all? I grieve) and do I dare posterity? What does that mean? to ordain (who called us blessed?) and who said thatKoresh was NOT? (i protested by my tv.) The same that nailed the Christ to cross? I'm asking...tell me, what it cost ashes ashes dust to dust and prophets just become the stuff written in the scrolls of sand deemed holy when another man says it shall be so as they wipe the tears of war away finely with a sable brush after years of grief? They say: "and establish" written then for a world that had this whim of a dream of freedom cry and this constitution lies begging for renewal of the purity of blood of dove written in the ink that dries: Tell them that they did not fight for us to just become like them... legalizing parliament somewhere inbetween the stars held together by the blue: Tell me that the words are true establish this the constitute shun the strength our absolute for the United (that is us) States (oh pray) America. I need to believe again. "We the people" open gates "We the people" unafraid offer refuge from the hate "We the people" aren't too late to make this what it's meant to be... WE I do believe that's us. The people constitutioned-less? [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (09-21-2004 04:54 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the ripple effect...something we should all always and forever keep in mind... You have done a marvelous job here, written from a heart who cares so deeply about our future...thank you |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
OMG Stomping my feet and applauding..stomp-clap-stomp! Brilliant writing, enjoyed immensely, how its rhythm matches the theme, and how well its poetry has been distilled from the huge vessel of words that could have been said about the subject...This needs to be read aloud and with patriotic fervor by everyone.. ---------------ice ><> Come read to me some poem, Some simple and heartfelt lay, That shall soothe this restless feeling And banish the thoughts of day. Longfellow |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'll be back...not only to read, but to help keep THIS on at the TOP! Brava Lady... is your brain swimming? Your heart SHOULD be...with EMOTION! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW,oh Wow, you are positively incredible..I could cry...I'll say again, you ARE Poetica!  M'ladyKeeping this. Mxx Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 PERFECTION The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
It is not easy to take an established set of words, and question them so distinctly, individually, inner- and retrospectively... but what you have done here, is bring the WE/US forward to cheer, that we can, indeed, do what you just did... perhaps not as eloquently and decisively...but it is still our choice to inspect, decide, stand, and deliver... Well done my friend! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is wonderful! It is such a creative way to take words we've known all our lives and consider what those words really mean. Well done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Fabulous!! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
K, What can I say? If there is poetry in truth, then there is poetry in lies. You stir my cauldron of despair here. And I fear the pendulum of power has not finished its fearsome period. Enjoyed this cascade, nevertheless. e |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*smile* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I thought I was in for a treat when I read the title... before I was even close to being through, I was hoping you'd take on each and every amendment. *S* Excellent work!! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God K . . . the way you bring it all together is profound: stars I see the whore in me licking whey from ladle saved by government in subsidy dying poor too fat for grave they burn us by the pound and sound the trumpets of the lessons vexed the general welfare... nice placement, Lady I mean that in every sense . . . |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 I can launch myself into quite a little tirade sometimes, can't I? thanks for reading, and most especially for understanding my frustration, here. Love to you all.  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ya come up for air yet? Good lord m'witch! Said as well as it can be, it seems. But I carved out this wee bit "I'm baffled by the endlessness of what it all implies." A beauty, Karen |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Serenity, What a poem, what questions, what answers! Your mind shines, Karen! miscellanea |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Howl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
:calapping: when I stop clapping my hands and spinning around... THIS is a masterpiece, Karen, and I think your should stomp your socio-political feet more often. *shaking my head in awe and admiration* I need to know exactly how to spell your last name lady, yanno, they DO verify all those write-ins.  We, the people... indeed. KEEPER KEEPER KEEPER |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Definitely... amazing. Enjoyed, and appreciated. Well done. -Rdz One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I almost always like your hobby horse, and especially this one. Excellent, you tell 'em girl! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ya know? Awful as it sounds...but I know you will take it in the SPIRIT it is meant...if you were Prez...they'd assasinate you...write on sister!!!!!!!!! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
This is a spectacular write and I have read and re-read several times. I hung on every single word. You tell 'em and you go girl! FABULOUS!!  Hugs and smiles, Marti When women are depressed they either eat or go shopping. Men invade another country. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
I forgot to save this ..... Marti When women are depressed they either eat or go shopping. Men invade another country. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that was a trip! and a great one. |
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Mr_Brady's_Housekeeper New Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 8 |
Fantastic! there's so much to ponder here. I wish I could write something like this. Alice |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
prefect i mean perfect yeh |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow... Yep... just wow... Always amazed by you... smile... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And I, the person, thank you all very much for your generosity. |
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