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Open Poetry #33

Picture Promenade

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2004-09-19 10:24 PM

Picture Promenade

there’s a giant goose
with an elephant’s trunk
speeding across the sky

trailing behind–
giant road-runner dust
from his rump to the setting sun

have you ever been
picture walking
beneath a cloud-pocked heaven

it’s mighty fun near end of day
when doors are closing
and toys are put away

one can see dreams
in those alabaster streams
that float within the blue

all you need is a playful mind
and freedom to expose it
for the simple joy it brings

©September 19, 2004

I suppose I should eliminate the last stanza...but at this point it's there. Maybe it's proclaiming my "right" to dream as a child.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-09-20 10:10 AM

all you need is a playful mind
and freedom to expose it
for the simple joy it brings

Yes, yes yes, a wonderful way to look at life

Good one!!!!

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

2 posted 2004-09-20 10:31 AM

The perfect promenade! Oh, the images we can see are endless! VAS, your poem has been a pleasure to read.
miscellanea

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2004-09-20 10:34 AM

"have you ever been
picture walking
beneath a cloud-pocked heaven"

~ This is a wonderful way to describe this experience! Perfect!

And might I add, that from my perspective, the last stanza is a meaningful close to this fine poem!

From a fellow cloud gazer,
~ A big, happy hug!
EA

Mon Cherie