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Beauty of the Broken Light
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Beauty of the Broken Light |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I'm feeling like the stanzas should be rearranged so that the ending leaves a better taste. Ideas? Beauty of the Broken Light promises made promises lost promises kept promises tossed the color of truth found in the light refracted in beauty patterned delight we watch for a rainbow we seek for its end; will it be discovered around the next bend? the prisms of tears or raindrops that fall divide life’s sweet rays as colors enthrall to always be seeking there’s things we may miss in the hues of a teardrop or the scent of a kiss while watching for corners or beyond the next span we may come colliding with what is at hand the damage we do may be beyond remedy we must pray for staunch wisdom and sage eyes to see Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
I don't really understand the placing of stanza changing your poem. Sorry I can't be of any help. - Haze |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
the prisms of tears or raindrops that fall sweet lines v, ~w |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Your title called the stanzas to place...they are as they should be... Beautiful. TD |
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