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When Gentleman Jack Comes To Call
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When Gentleman Jack Comes To Call |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
sung to the tune in your head he was smoke and mash whiskey rode in on a big black steed drank with the finest saloon girls to quench his insatiable need she was night in black velvet hiding behind secret walls practiced her song in pink lamplight and longed for the gentle man’s call his holster contained a big gun he fingered the mother of pearl black leather boasted his swagger he knew he’d get his girl she let him play her piano in the music room of her dreams now he orchestrates all of her soul ohhhhhhs and she dances in berries and cream they didn’t ride off in the sunset but they might steal the day with a kiss or passions unveiled in the moonlight to capture a moment of bliss No End |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Enjoyed this, Kahlil! Easy to visualize! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The "NO END" ending, was perfect! Loved the visuals and the tone of this write! Hope all is well with you, K! It sure sounds as though it is with this upbeat poem! Loves 'n hugs, EA |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The NO End was the best...brought a smile to my heart and mind...lovely music you've just shared with us...a grand piano song.... smiles and hugs, enjoyed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
gunsmoke and leather dance hall perfume and walls of naughty pine keeeewllll movie ms Kahlil |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
great rhythm and flow lively oater scenes could see the whole scene even the parts left to the minds eye, i.e. saloon doors swinging ruffles and lace J.D. and jiggers and boot spurs pock-marking old wooden floors stained with spitoon target practice three sheets to the wind hehehehe  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this and the NO END!  Much enjoyed the read. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now, this likes me...a LOT! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 nice way to spend a day, eh? very very cool song, Kahlilly |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
they didn’t ride off in the sunset but they might steal the day with a kiss No end.... is the the best way to remember and a pretty nice place to be. Happy ever after is a thing of the past, I do believe!! (Ah heck, that's just me blowing smoke from my jaded pistol) Ha!! Good on ya, Kahlil~ *enjoyed* |
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