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Open Poetry #33

A lonely place of Peace

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2004-09-16 01:36 AM

Sweet dance of sunlight bathes her
shoulder, allow me a moments pause
to gasp the failing sight. My eyes
cannot forgive themselves the loss
of interaction, a testament to the
miles I have walked. Waters last
spray finds my face yet does not
quench the thirst I have for the
simple thing, called forgeting. A
life lost for nothing, but the
tender grasp of the hand as his
soul leaves me. What I came for
was an ideal, a shame I have none
of it left as I want my dreams
to reinvent my mind, but the
horrors I see surround me. Dark
eyes stare, she wraps herself
hiding her body and face in arabic
wonder, stands to leave, a pause.
Sweet dance of sunlight bathes me
as the pain of the bullet brings me
home to dance in freedom.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-09-16 07:54 AM

very powerful write...well done

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

2 posted 2004-09-16 08:28 AM

interesting

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-09-16 05:14 PM

I'm not sure if I'm reading this one right, but it sounds like the 'speaker' may have been a soldier sent home after being wounded in battle, and is recalling the feelings and scene that surrounded him as he held the hand of one who didn't make it.
But then I also thought about two people, whose love had died.

whatever the story and intent, it is a poignant write

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