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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
A solitary tear trickles, onto the man lying before me Surrounded by death, disease and destruction Injured soldiers, wrench my heart. Cover up strength, but beneath fragile glass Holding on by my fingertips But my grip is weakening, I’m starting to slip, Taken by the forces of evil, That made this war commence. Now nothing more than a broken body, Empty without my soul. I wish I could kiss the wounds of the men, Heal the pain beneath their skin But I have been taken by the demons Their roaring fires engulf me. Yet still my solitary tear trickles, And my sigh echoes into the dismal depth of nothingness. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I can see where this scenario may be an envisionment of current happens and the solitary tear is the violence that has no end...interesting piece |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
To lose and then lose again Dave |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this gave me chills and a subject I have pondered over again and again |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Stunningly powerful...goes into the soul and settles there... |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Even one tear can have an echo which carries through such emptiness .... ... many share that tear. Good write. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
thanks for the replies everyone. i wrote this piece for social studies at school, we had to write about war and the effects of it. "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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