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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

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0 posted 2004-09-15 03:28 PM

Evening

It is one thing to watch
the moon gate open wide,
surge through in spirit or
in something like imagination,
take my solace in the visions
of eternal, patched with fantasy;

It is yet another to look
for hope in bars of cloud
with a little light at the edges,
seek fortune in the spacing
of these frail stars.

How much better, though
less sweet, to find a sustenance,
slender, yearning, ever present
in this simple yard,
hold for these few moments,
merely listen to the sound
of plums growing.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

1 posted 2004-09-15 03:35 PM

How much better, though
less sweet, to find a sustenance,
slender, yearning, ever present
in this simple yard,
hold for these few moments,
merely listen to the sound
of plums growing.

Reaping the fruit in your own back yard...
Sounds like a good thing to do. Enjoy.
Enjoyed,
miscellanea

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-09-15 03:54 PM

Yes

Dave

mrmojorisin5908
Member

since 2004-05-03

Posts 103
Colorado

3 posted 2004-09-15 03:58 PM

Nice write buddy. I enjoyed it.

"if you stare into the abyss long enough,it'll stare back into you."

sim0riah
Member

since 2004-09-07

Posts 253
Wyoming USA

4 posted 2004-09-15 04:31 PM

Very Nice Indeed!!!

sim0riah

Only at night you can see the depth of the sun

Sim0riah

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2004-09-15 05:14 PM

There are times when I know you could give lessons... not just on how to write... but on how to live... and value every moment. *S*

This is superb!!!

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2004-09-15 05:27 PM

Ed

Amazing what you can hear when you listen with your heart.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2004-09-15 06:56 PM

LIke this...James

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2004-09-15 07:56 PM

Sir, I believe there is only one very
fine remark that poets who truly enjoy
an offering as fine as this, can say:

IWIHWT

For I truly do!

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

9 posted 2004-09-17 09:26 PM

It is yet another to look
for hope in bars of cloud
with a little light at the edges,

Striking imagery. made me gasp a little

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

10 posted 2004-09-17 11:38 PM

They squeak just a little,
when they are young.

e

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

11 posted 2004-09-18 01:25 AM

Yes, so much better. Enjoyed this, RatL.

....jo

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2004-09-18 02:46 AM

It is yet another to look
for hope in bars of cloud
with a little light at the edges,
seek fortune in the spacing
of these frail stars.

You render the evening with such a sensitive sound,
and a sense of well being of that time and space in between.

This is you at your best, Ed~

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

13 posted 2004-09-18 03:18 AM

I loved the pictures this painted. It reminded me of a song I hear on the radio quite a bit where he states that his favorite view is, "from the front porch looking in." I would have to say that regardless of what your looking at, as long as your home, your feeling good. Beats the Hell out of looking at the machines on the production floor, anyway! This poem was engaging and I loved it!

Kevin

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