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gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-09-14 09:39 PM

Spiny masses of sun spears
pierced

eventually

in the middle of a shallow afternoon
as I mis-spent daylight hours
inside,
with all the windows closed

something woke me

it wasn't directly you.

I'm not sure of the hour
when this all became so uniformly sad

a battle of will
of skirt length and made up eyes
or absence of ties and blazers,

someone taught me a lesson;

You can never go back
on rules you choose to break

no matter how may lines
of apologetic repetition
meet chalk
and board

facing the wall
ashamed

they promise to play back slowly
in mid morning pace

slow and sleepy

no matter the time of day

with or without you weeping.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-09-14 10:01 PM

a battle of will
of skirt length and made up eyes
or absence of ties and blazers,

someone taught me a lesson;

~*~

And WHAT a lesson!

Well done, Gemma!

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2004-09-14 11:26 PM

~ COOL ~

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2004-09-15 05:01 PM

Thanks guys. xxx

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

4 posted 2004-09-15 11:29 PM

This one almost got away

A solid write Gemma

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2004-09-15 11:31 PM

You can never go back
on rules you choose to break

KIND of hard to , very true , very perceptive write, right from start to finish, well done

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2004-09-19 01:20 PM

someone taught me a lesson;

You can never go back
on rules you choose to break

no matter how may lines
of apologetic repetition
meet chalk
and board

facing the wall
ashamed

It's a tough lesson to learn much less accept the things we cannot change.

Nice writing gemma~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2004-09-19 03:17 PM

Oh Gem, dont I know this:

You can never go back
on rules you choose to break

your picture is beautiful!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2004-09-19 04:25 PM

You can never go back
on rules you choose to break

Unfortunately.. no.

Fortunately though I found this great write.
Well said Gemma

Maree

Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2004-09-21 12:27 PM

Gemma, you hit it straight on when you said

"You can never go back
on rules you choose to break"

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

10 posted 2004-09-21 11:47 AM

Your words always have such depth to their beauty.

Great write!

Eric

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2004-09-21 10:04 PM

youre computer is never allowed to go down again..welcome back tfw

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