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sea-bitten and akimbo (lighthouse series scene 10)
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sea-bitten and akimbo (lighthouse series scene 10) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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i remember those trumpeting days when dreams shivered and tossed over the breath of sea some were colourful even daisies sprung from the swell of shells sea-bitten and akimbo holding all I could (the cry of gulls the soft slap of waves tales of legendary mermaids jilted brides and the ovalness of fish) i’d make visible the steely forms in birth of night shifting through the salt-mist phantasmagoric yes the darkness breaks me in my crippling and there’s no forgetting the birth of fishes tail that bangs at my shut windows :angel of darkness: 150904 The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. ~Stevie Nicks~ |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Very well written - yes Dave |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Like this very much.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree "and there’s no forgetting the birth of fishes tail that bangs at my shut windows" And it would be hard to forget the imagery of this poem!  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I spent as much of my summer taking costal walks, or cliff sitting taking photographs as possible. Personally, this reminds me of the spell that the sea can put upon me, and I love it. I'd forgotten about this series! p.s a berk is a silly person, an idiot. x |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
phantasmagoric yes the darkness breaks me in ~*~ The point of this poem is not so much to take one on a walk across a beach, but to feel the surreal of the twilight... at least, to me. And to me, little one... this is a marvelous addition to your lighthouse series. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is macabre and sensual somehow... you are there in the waves sweety... and i hold you in my heart just high enough so we both wont drown.... miss you girl  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well Darksis, there you go again...With your uncommon and MOST evocative imagery (Nice lid, btw) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
yo hat!! dis breaks glasses ... your mojo is a candy jar of kewl (large smile inserted here) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
well written  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
too beautiful to be lost already. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know i love your writing |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Yep, I missed one. Yep, Beautiful as expected. Yep, Impressed. Yep, Picking my jaw up off the floor again. Yep, I absorbed it like a sponge. Yep, a fan. Big K |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
i remember those trumpeting days when dreams shivered and tossed over the breath of sea some were colourful even daisies sprung from the swell of shells sea-bitten and akimbo holding all I could smiling here* ya know, your writing is just fantastic. I hope you get told that all of the time, cuz you truly are a fantastic writer. I enjoyed this immensely! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
i’d make visible the steely forms in birth of night shifting through the salt-mist phantasmagoric yes ..... my breath accelerated while reading this powerful piece .... there is a special flow of mystery in this .....YES. Love, Margherita |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
i will blame the burn in my eyes from a lack of sleep and a very long and tiring shift at work- tsk- very moving mmy off to bed for a nap now that i hope i have caught up on my angelpoems JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"i remember those trumpeting days when dreams shivered and tossed over the breath of sea some were colourful even daisies sprung from the swell of shells sea-bitten and akimbo" ahha loved this... and daisies are my favorite flower... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
"(the cry of gulls the soft slap of waves tales of legendary mermaids jilted brides and the ovalness of fish) i’d make visible the steely forms in birth of night shifting through the salt-mist" ********************** Such wonders and mysteries of the sea we would so much like to understand. And that shifting through the salt-mist .... well, that beacon searchs for us, guides us, but it too is constantly chasing the waves, looking for that one path of understand. Excellent imagery and the flow ........ Superb. Your lines and line breaks are perfection and give us only as much as we need, nothing more nothing less, just complete enough. A very enjoyable read from start to finish. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Not always to shut windows, yet always to seek attention, from such a beautiful soul. Though my understanding of your writing is limited, I do appreciate the soul of you. Billy 8) |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Today is the first day I've read your work - I'm amazed...very nice...you have me wanting to read more |
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