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September Morn |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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 STOP SHORT #1: September Morn *a-5-ch chinese chueh-chu The dawn hides between words. Paper-thin thoughts ... cover me. Your kiss; holds my name, lost syllables ... until you spoke ©sdt'04 ~~~ author's note...this is a new form for me, so please be patient with me if you know more about it, as i learn and write more. "Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless." --Mother Teresa [This message has been edited by Snow (09-15-2004 03:53 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very beautiful! I shall have to learn more about this form.. it is truly lovely. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I use short poems because I can write the very long ones but no-one reads beyond their fade off limit. I decided to look at the real audience that reads wanted and it was short punchy and they didn't give damn apart from being entertained. It was on this site but at one point I used a single letter and 30 people helped to write something. Write what you happy with - dont write for others, write for and believe in yourself. Everything goes in cycles. Dave Order Restaurant full Staff seat Chopsticks morning and fun and ho The dawn hides between words. Paper-thin thoughts ... cover me. Your kiss; holds my name, lost syllables ... until you spoke |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I should have said it wasn't on this site, not it was. Can I leave my mistake and Summer's Morn for you which I have put on the site before. Dave Summer’s Morn Looking into your eyes A crimson mess Swirling the world beneath your feet Flowing your hair to match your dress And the love of your eyes Was deep, sad and warm I saw the tilt of your nose Light the smile of your lips The love of belonging In your own time and space A deep laughter in your throat Of another summer's morn |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
dave, thank you for sharing "summer's morn" with me. i'm sorry that i missed it when you shared. as for you writing long ones, i give you back your own words.... write and share what comes from you, for you. no one else. i don't write for others. i only left the note in case someone else is more familiar with this form of writing. as it's brand new for me. .....again, thank you for sharing your poem it is beautiful and i'm glad i had the chance to read it. thank you both for taking the time to comment. snow |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
SWEET ! |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Hey Snow, I really like the poem here. Don't know this form but it does look like an interesting one. :-) |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
if anyone is interested, send me an email and i can try to explain ;-) it was more difficult reading the how to's than just doing it :-D (i think) thank you for the comments. "Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless." |
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sim0riah Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 253Wyoming USA |
Very Nice Snow...I look forward to reading more from you. sim0riah Only at night you can see the depth of the sun |
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