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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-09-13 04:01 PM


Running shredding dancing away water free cotton cloth for the rain
Swhising along eyes looking back cotton moving
Eyes black eyelids open

Some words are deliberately mispelled - I leave yo7u to identify the image from the words from?

Dave

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miscellanea
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1 posted 2004-09-13 04:07 PM


Dave,
  I'm glad to see the misspelling!  I find it can be a very powerful tool. I've used it a lot, "mostly" intentionally!  I like the impressionalistic quality you've painted.
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DavePage
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2 posted 2004-09-13 04:15 PM


I remember at a kid trying to draw in charcoal the dancers and I couldn't.

Maybe in words I can draw an image that my hands lack the skill for.

thanks

dave

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3 posted 2004-09-13 04:46 PM


Excellent imagery here Dave...
Much enjoy your work.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

miscellanea
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4 posted 2004-09-13 07:24 PM


I think so, Dave.
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DavePage
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5 posted 2004-09-13 07:38 PM


Words to understand life

Thanks

dave

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6 posted 2004-09-14 02:01 AM


I agree with the others on this one.

:-)

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7 posted 2004-09-14 09:15 AM


well, when I was a kid, when we had spelling bees, I was the first to sit down...that can be darn embarrasing...so you've hit a soft spot...smiles

I agree with everyone else here, well done

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8 posted 2004-09-14 11:10 AM


Thanks

Dave

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9 posted 2004-09-14 12:54 PM


good to see you back here

I guess you got your program fixed? I remember you were having some trouble before.

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10 posted 2004-09-14 01:06 PM


Oh, you're such a tease! ~ and a playful one at that!

I liked this! Sort of an abstract painting with werds! lol

Love & Life!
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11 posted 2004-09-14 01:38 PM


Hmmm...I see opera/ballet/dance...interpretative style...

but I don't do well with guessing games, and I was never the last one to sit down at a spelling bee...LOL...

more clues in poetic form, please?

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12 posted 2004-09-14 01:38 PM


and, oh, in case you never go to Announcements?

Go to Announcements.  

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13 posted 2004-09-14 02:09 PM


I will go to announcements.

I thought I was being good.

Dave

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