Dissertation of the Darkness

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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2004-09-13 07:20 AM

Why is the dark there?
To make the light more noticed,
It must be somewhere,
Surrounding me it’s enticed,
As a comfort not a scare.

For tears are unseen
Dripping down my horrid face,
As if never been
For you can’t see it this place
Excepting the mind’s pretend.

What’s dark’s component?
Why it is nothing at all,
If any is lent
Then the darkness starts to fall,
As mixing light is then spent.

So with my dark heart
I mean nothing is seen there,
No one grabs a part
No one enters the dark lair,
Nothing remains there to start.

Gloom

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-09-13 07:34 AM

kinda gave me a wayless feeling...
catching sight of human puzzles, squinting to examine and understand

Sending hugs...tremendous write!

Morning Professor

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2004-09-13 07:35 AM

Professor,
Reminds me of the saying, laugh and the world laughs with you, cry and you cry alone. Good write

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

3 posted 2004-09-13 09:23 AM

What’s dark’s component?
Why it is nothing at all,
If any is lent
Then the darkness starts to fall,
As mixing light is then spent.

So with my dark heart
I mean nothing is seen there,
No one grabs a part
No one enters the dark lair,
Nothing remains there to start.

Professor,
   For some reason I'm reminded of outer space and its darkness. There, sound doesn't appear to travel, but still we have voices and ears and can hear, given the right circumstances.  I just wonder if your poem isn't the same in an abstract way. If one were to change the circumstances by taking out the verbs lent and grabs, changing them to "given", would the light still be "spent" or would it simply change its hue?  What would happen in the universe, as the Verizon Man says in the background, "Can you hear me now?"

   By no means would I want to change this excellent poem.  Poems like this are stimulating, causing one to think and ponder.
Wow.  Outstanding write...
                 miscellanea

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-09-13 12:14 PM

cathy said it best here

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2004-09-13 12:53 PM

WOW!!! Your words have you wrapped up in darkness...only you can let light back in for with light comes joy...Powerful writing...

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