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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-09-12 04:16 PM



~*~

There are two sides to everything
where imaginary lines are drawn,
you stay on your side and I'll stay on mine
so no one gets hurt.

It's part of the blame
and the games people play
wounding the heart,
that won't stop from bleeding.

I've had several close scrapes
of boo boo's and band-aids.
I've cried and thrown tantrums
but I'll not pine away long.

Now don't you be worrying or have a care if you dare,
I'm not counting on you to toss me a line.
For this too shall pass and mend on it's own
without leaving me scarred.

I'll float my own hope and walk away whole.
Becoming one with my shadow that lifts in the fog,
where there's no sides to take
or lines to be drawn.

~*~

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Snow
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1 posted 2004-09-12 05:05 PM


"Becoming one with my shadow that lifts in the fog,"
damn.... i wish i had thought of that.

strong piece, i really enjoyed it.


snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

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Gaia
2 posted 2004-09-12 05:08 PM


Very nicely done! And I'm with Snow on this, that's a great line, for anyone.
Susan
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-09-12 06:45 PM


Agree with the above.  Well done.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2004-09-13 01:59 AM


strong write from a strong lady
kayjay
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5 posted 2004-09-13 06:02 PM


"Becoming one with my shadow that lifts in the fog,"

This line is great, but the pathos in your entire write is strong.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

miscellanea
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6 posted 2004-09-13 06:14 PM


Nicely done from title on!  LOVE this!
  
    
I'll float my own hope and walk away whole.
Becoming one with my shadow that lifts in the fog,
where there's no sides to take
or lines to be drawn.

iliana
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7 posted 2004-09-13 08:36 PM


That'a girl, Bluesy.  Good write!   ...jo
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8 posted 2004-09-13 08:42 PM


I wish I'd written this, Bluesy.


MyHeartofShadows
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9 posted 2004-09-13 08:53 PM


Very nicely done, I thought it was going to be about children, but it wasn’t.  Yet at somethings aren’t we all children, especially Love.  Too many scrapes and scatches and not enough bandaids.
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In Your Poetic Mind
10 posted 2004-09-13 08:56 PM


sigh sweet lady, I just bought a new box....will share however many you need
hugsss you--you are lovely -- believe that!


Lauren~

I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2004-09-14 12:00 PM


I have enough on my plate these days,
and don't have time to pine away.

So I'm staying on my side, for good!!

Thank you always, everyone.

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