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Evi Junior Member
since 2004-04-10
Posts 18 |
I felt your heart heavy on my shoulder, the night you cried I felt you arm heavy round my waist, while we did lie I knew then you were all i wanted, for all time I waited for you to tell her you were all mine You never did, So here i sit, alone at night wanting you, needing you, How long must i wait, til i'm all yours and you realise Till you look at me that way, see it in my eyes I'll love you forever, you know i will I loved you always, I love you still. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Tis hard to love and long - this speaks of such a wait and desire - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I feel this good write....welcome to Passions |
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Evi Junior Member
since 2004-04-10
Posts 18 |
Thank you, I'm not really sure, if i like it not, i think it needs work. Evi xxx |
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Evi Junior Member
since 2004-04-10
Posts 18 |
Scrap that, i know it needs work. Just not sure where to start  Evi xxx |
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Daniel Storm Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 91New York |
Its a good honest write. I'm not much good with form but I see sincerity and I admire that. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Wow. Lovely, melodic, yearning. Loved it! "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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