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mickeeshell
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since 2004-09-06

Posts 5

0 posted 2004-09-09 04:30 PM

Through the window
heaven is crying
tears assail my world
delicately painted florets stretch to drink
they are paltry and weak
our garden is dying

He says he misses me
the velvet of my mouth
the blue in my eyes
he doesn't know they've turned to gray
I am tired
longing just to suspend my consciousness

Nothing can release these haunts from me
so articulate his pen
weighing every word
vividly depicting his passion and all of his beautiful dreams
I told him not to waste his youth on me

I wish for his poetry to die

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

1 posted 2004-09-09 04:35 PM

glad i stopped. very good

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-09-09 05:04 PM

On the edge of a corner
in a frame of glass
protecting the drip of water
from the inside
explored a ripple
building itself until a torrent
testing the seal
of the frame
we look through

I liked your words

regards

Dave

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2004-09-09 05:09 PM

"He says he misses me
the velvet of my mouth
the blue in my eyes
he doesn't know they've turned to gray
I am tired
longing just to suspend my consciousness

Nothing can release these haunts from me"

I really enjoyed this

mickeeshell
New Member

since 2004-09-06

Posts 5

4 posted 2004-09-10 12:24 PM

thank you all for the kind replies

Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

5 posted 2004-09-10 04:21 PM

It is a terrible thing, to say something that is not meant. Especially if the words are love words. I hope that they turn true for you.

Kaz

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2004-09-12 01:12 AM

Haunting indeed~
I hope your garden will bloom and grow another day.

Never say die!!

Welcome to passions mickeeshell~

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

7 posted 2004-09-13 01:08 AM

Sad but beautiful, I loved every single line.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-09-13 01:09 AM

what an ending

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