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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-09-10 08:11 AM

spray can crayola
an artist with a gun
bullet mark terpsichore
paints hondas mostly
for fun

tattoo of jesus
a man he has never known
hit a padre once
to show his lady
he had bone

rosie did bisquits
for his breakfast meal
he took her cash
and ran from the donut man
with a new gold shield

101 knows no one
just concrete waiting to eat
some grill of a chevy
and the speed inside
when it starts to bleed

now a stranger pays the rent
_____________

Dark

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2004-09-10 08:14 AM

OUCH darn....very vivid images. But then, you are the master of vivid.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-09-10 08:15 AM

whew, this one really bites the heart...yes, a stranger pays the rent...
Fabulous write, here's wishing you a great day and an even better weekend...
Good Morning Mr...
You are colorful this morning, bright and early with a smile, a cup of coffee in your hand, waving a Good Morning to all of us

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2004-09-10 08:25 AM

wow the reality of this....

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-09-10 08:41 AM

101 knows no one
just concrete waiting to eat

~*~

Oh...it once knew me...
maybe it will treat me
as an old friend,
and welcome me back...

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2004-09-10 08:55 AM

always a lesson when I read you.. and always a pleasure to learn..

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2004-09-10 09:04 AM

Again, word artistry at its best. With just a few short bursts from your own word spray can, you've painted a vivid, powerful image.
Masterfully done, DS.

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

7 posted 2004-09-10 09:15 AM

diagnosis 101 in full attendance
no prescription available at this time

colorful you

K

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

8 posted 2004-09-10 10:40 AM

Owie - this paints a harsh landscape - it is sad to me, but very well painted by you.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-09-10 12:48 PM

sad indeed

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

10 posted 2004-09-10 03:40 PM

you know, this instantly reminded me
of people I know who run out
and get tats of tribal art and celtic
knots just to have them, having NO
clue what the message is . . .

amazing writing . . .

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