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soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2004-09-10 02:38 AM

Chocolate Brunettes & Strawberry Blondes

Chocolate brunettes and strawberry blondes
are in the keeping of me tonight
cherry redheads with blueberry eyes
waif through the black on black roads
stilettos through puddles
like daggers through backs
split end strands of clouds
stray into the eye of the moon
and glitter-bursting stars crown the sky
with all the ragged glory
that these ladies of the canyon
cradle through spiraling astral weeks
great rouge dams hold back flooding tears
and razor-edged eyelashes sway in the breeze
as wilting hearts fall gracefully from brittle stems
and the thorns are as dull as dinnertime conversation
mightily I try to reverse the bitter autumn
that too many vain “I love you” mutterings have wrought
train stops and raindrops steaming down south again
as I stare through the glass half empty
and think upon these women that have shaped me
time after time

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-09-10 03:15 AM

cool write

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2004-09-10 07:09 PM

Enjoyed...James

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

3 posted 2004-09-10 07:44 PM

I like the colors and flavors used to write this. I also enjoyed the style.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-09-10 07:47 PM

Very nicely penned and much enjoyed.
Hugs~Nancy

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

5 posted 2004-09-10 07:52 PM

Soul Drifter this is a beautiful poem you have written here.
Now on to the truth....You See......
I am The Chocolate Monster and I fly about the internet on my Chocolate Broom looking for Chocolate.
As I was flying about... what did I hear coming through cyberspace, but the word Chocolate and I had to stop and see who was speaking this delightful, melt in your mouth word.
Welcome to PIP.
BonBon aka The Chocolate Monster

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2004-09-11 09:38 PM

this is very descriptive and evoking many thoughts

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2004-09-12 12:03 PM

too many vain “I love you” mutterings have wrought
train stops and raindrops steaming down south again
as I stare through the glass half empty

Yes!!!
You've got an artist's eye, and an amazing assortment of colors on your palette.

Great stuff, soul drifter~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2004-09-12 09:32 AM

Bluesy nailed it, you are an artist.
You use delightful visual imagery to unfold the very taste and feel of life.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2004-09-12 09:52 AM

enjoyed

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