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Once Upon A Fool... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
the pen proved mightier than that of sword swift the cut of nevermore in trickled stream these feelings bled to taint and stain the marriage bed t'was the joker who be wild? peer deeper now, defenceless child on glassy surfaced truth we see once bared the forrest of the trees pure and true of heart this lure from chasity to love unsure tumbled over hills and lost in search of one at any cost deep within the brown and gold a flame no more in which to hold a self once loved and cherished much denied in want of lover's touch illusioned feast of froth and foam a house of cards, my crumpled home the sweet more bitter therefore I eat and come to know the taste defeat the pen proved mightier than that of sword beware unsteady heart, be sure the hand is quicker than the eye and cannot stay the wave good bye no matter how hard one might try... ~tier |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
extremely well done ma'am... but filled with a good deal of pain it seems..and strife unwanted.. hope all is well with you.. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thanks, Captain! But not to worry, things are fine. Lost my muse for a bit and it seems to have taken off again after writing this poem. Good to "see" you! ~tier  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Tier, it is very good to see your words again, and I am sooo glad your ok. This is very poignant writing, but very well done. Hugs. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
tier Well done a delight to read. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...powerfuly expressed! Eric |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Daniel Storm Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 91New York |
Enjoyed the rhyme. Like the joker inclusion too, makes me think of myself (smile) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
More than nice...better than good A different voice? Muse? No matter, very well done! Ed |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
very nice |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the pen proved mightier than that of sword beware unsteady heart, be sure the hand is quicker than the eye and cannot stay the wave good bye ~*~ Ah, it's a good day when I get to read you...  |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Tiersden, No critique from me, but I applaud you just the same. quatro |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm so glad you found your muse again Tier It's great to read you. Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This one makes me sad. Too much truth in it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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