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Gray Cool Rags Time
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Gray Cool Rags Time |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Gray Cool Rags Time This baggage will be profound, en route to a past, where all presents sound like yesterday, hollows echoing former times, where tracing lines lead through valleys as dipping curves curse me, rehearse me, traverse me, waiting for me to trip upon my soul… I want to seek once more rags of gray, where finger wisps caress my cheek again, shuddering goose-bumps to stand in line, trembling me back to youth, when sea-mist kissed my eyes, yes, I want the rags of gray, those hoary cool rags creating a time where voices sound from far away somewhere in the mist… somewhere in the mist… so let great curls and curves of wave sound and pound despair of grave, for somewhere ashes fed the wind somewhere ashes fed… my feet feel close chill morning sand, eyes closed tight, my hand in hand between two tall figures, who stand to bear my weight in lift and flight and hand me over, to the night… hand me over, then, to cool gray rags time come and kiss my cheek, sweet mist, come and kiss… let me seek these ribbons cool, rags of time gray in hands of mine, as salt comes to sting my lips… yes, salt will sting my lips. I will wait for sun to burn away the gray cool rags of yesterday and leave my baggage with time. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, I absolutely love this Sunshinygirl, the way it rolled upon my tongue.  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God, this is like a wave Kari . . . it is timeless . . . this blew me away . . . it is like a song of yourself (Whitman) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Isn't this a place where we all wish to have in our present, not our past? I think so. What pulled me in here to read? You did! You grabbed me by the ear and said "come on, now!".....Well, here I am... I take away many things from what you write. Sometimes a remember of my own past...perhaps a moment of philosophy, of wisdom...of saying to myself that I have been down that road...she knows of it too...and more, much more. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I love the flow, the repetition, the rhythm that the repetition brings. The images, the language as it caresses the lips tongue and ears. Yep! Great stuff!!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow ... double WOW !!  "At one glance |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
May I echo my sister with a huge WOW!!!!!! Fantastic write Karilea!!! Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I will wait for sun to burn away the gray cool rags of yesterday and leave my baggage with time." ~ Oh, yes, dear Sunshine. Oh, yes... Love & Light, Linda P.S. Love your new photo! You look great as a blond ~ it reflects the sun's golden rays! |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hello Sunshine...this is going back to the top of the list RIGHT NOW! That is where it belongs!!!! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
SIL, oh, if only we could! This was an hypnotic piece. I felt caught in a time warp at the ocean's edge. Very special!  ......jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, back to the top |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something misty here like the skin when it is aroused with goose flesh and some friendly fog is all that one wears enjoyed this lady kewl stuff |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I can't say enough! This is just incredible. As I read it aloud, it wisped me along rags of gray. Beautiful wording and smooth as silk flow... missie |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such a strong message of longing for those we've lost in life. The only resolve is the feeling that those lost can still know we miss them. Great images and flow. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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