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Drifting Woulds (a nakdthoughts/GS duet)
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Drifting Woulds (a nakdthoughts/GS duet) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Drifting Woulds Somedays a feeling washes over me And with it the drifting of the smiles I use to see When sand between our toes, walking together thoughts in know becomes the treasured wood The coming of the changing seasons makes me stop to ask the reasons the what's and why's of the who am I's. Somedays the memories of those times that seem to capture my true in rhyme are placed to float upon the blue that shares my warmth, the before of you resting in angled form on shelf I am drifting on the shoreline with the ebb and flow of tide while I try to determine what is in this heart of mine... Common lines positioned so though biased view from inner glow, the blending of, those times when seasons held the touch of mist, the salty splash of ocean's swell to cool the heat of loving's know Sands of time flow around me with visions of what is yet to be wandering, with no certain direction; waiting for the one true, special connection So I shall drift upon these oceans with my thoughts of evermore until gently I should come to rest as driftwood does upon the shore. {thank you M~ for such a delightful pleasure!!} |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I can feel the gritty walk As I listen to the gentle talk Scanning the rolling sea Just to look and see The leaves leaving the trees Changing season on a breeze Colored memories of spring Tinted in cool back they bring Catching the constructed rhyme Of another place and time. What wood drifts on shore Long floating found land once more How many wave did the wood ride To find this beach at high tide And when the ebbing shows Will it go with receding flows Treasured wood in the see Grounded brief from floating free Gloom well done you two enjoyed |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Donna, I absolutely LOVED Common lines positioned so though biased view from inner glow, the blending of, those times when seasons held the touch of mist, the salty splash of ocean's swell to cool the heat of loving's know Corinne |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is beautiful, both of you this stanza is amazing: The coming of the changing seasons makes me stop to ask the reasons the what's and why's of the who am I's. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very nicely done ladies...you write very well together. don't stop now!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote: couldn't get past that line this read so I'll be back later |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now here are some gently spirited naked thoughts that meld so VERY well, that I cannot, nor would want, to separate the stanzas. What a wonderful pairing. Please, please, do it again soon! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ladies~ I sit here in quiet admiration for the beautiful weaving of your thoughts~ Well done ... well done~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I thank you all so very much for your kind replies. I love doing the duets and wish we would see more on the boards! I believe it is a wonderful way to stretch our creativity and expand our poetic knowledge! M~ my thanks to you for making this such a wonderful duet, and making it as unique as you are. Thank you m'friend! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
stunning! lovely this hugsss x2 I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Perhaps it is my meloncholy this evening, but I find this write bittersweet. Beautiful in its compilation, but wistful in its wandering of the self. Very well written.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Donna, remind me to pick up a piece of driftwood the next time I go to the ocean... would sit nicely alongside this poem. Thanks for joining words with me, always a pleasure And thank you everyone for your responses  M |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Beautiful !!! Hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a beauty |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
how utterly lovely....this was soooo like sailing into the unknown, yet knowing someone was waiting there on the other side... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ladies, thank you so very much.  M~ thanks! Yes, driftwood would make for a perfect graphic with this post! |
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E S West Member
since 2004-08-31
Posts 116California |
What a great team effort.. wonderfully expressed... don't stop.. E S West |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Eric, are you enjoying yourself yet? M |
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