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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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If I could just find a good book Perhaps the words would get me hooked Into forgetting I realize that I’m to blame That every title looks so lame So I sit fretting Another night with no one there An endless search for one to care It’s getting so tough To silence these lonely screams Simply existing on dreams’s No longer enough But down the hall There’s the glow of candlelight And two lovers greet the night With loving embrace And as she yields to his touch He whispers he’s wanted so much Just to kiss her face And their lovers’ melody Echoes with such poignancy It should crumble stone Yet each note that hits my ears Brings an ache to drown in tears I am so alone. But down the hall I fix a drink and wear a frown Spend some time choosing a gown No eyes but mine will see Surrounded by emptiness I’m a stranger to happiness Afraid this is to be The endless story of my life No one’s lover, no one’s wife And again I find I cannot do enough drinking To provide escape from thinking That he once was mine But down the hall |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dear Lord gal.....you know, I have been there, done that, and it at times seems to never get easier but still we continue to go on. Gawd....this aches. Hugs to you sweet one.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
an exceptional write... Except for down the hall..this is me M |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Remember Laura, that what you think of as bliss just down the hall may exist only in your thoughts. Things behind that other door may be wonderful, or they may be hopelessly tangled, or dreary with the ennui of endless discontent. When we're down we see everybody else as up, and all too often it isn't so. But whatever happens, I hope you keep writing these beauties...you've become one of the people here whose work I read on sight. I didn't have time this morning, but when I saw your name on two poems, I made time. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Suchsweet pearls of sadness..thank you.. Goldenrose. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have to agree with James here |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
GS & nakdthoughts: I wish none of us knew the reality of this... but yes... we go on. *S* Thank you so much, kind ladies. *S* Jamie: But whether there's bliss down the hall or simply an act that makes it seem so... that doesn't erase the alone. *S* Thank you so very much... seeing your name on my work is always a treat!!! *S* GR: pearls of sadness... I like that image very much... Thank you! *S* PS: Thanks for reading! *S* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I don't know what's worse being all alone and hurting, or when you are with someone and you are still alone...either way I guess, it hurts... this is so expressed so well, I love the italicized line.....it says something different each time....your talent is showing beautifully lady  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
jellybeans: I'd love a life with better options than those. *S* Thank you so much, my friend... the verses had sat around not fitting with one another... that line you like showed up to pull it together. *S* |
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