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a stirring of the breeze
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a stirring of the breeze |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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whispering breeze calls quietly follow me . . . coaxing, bidding, tempting a slip stream fantasy stirring my soul to longing to wander tied as I am to the world loose the knot, follow me . . . fettered to duty and pledge come away, know me solid in my dependability feel my heated breath honor bound to the expected tremble beneath my kiss Propriety and sense I am the unexpected I stand firm in my resolution I am the unknown holding tight lest I be swept along I am the truth of you with the passing lure of change s.a.t. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Two poems in one! Love it! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Susan~ I like everything about this piece~ Delicately lovely in every sense~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a treat! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I'm glad you all enjoyed this. It is the debating of two voices that pull- that of reason and responsibility, and that of desire. I'm glad it worked. Thanks for your replies -  Susan |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Susan, Thank you for this. I'd have to say it worked quite well. Contrast is a favorite theme of mine, here, you have exemplified it. Doc |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ahh, that little devil perched upon a shoulder...whispering softly in an ear. Heads or tails...after all, the choice is yours...plain as day....and then there is a right choice...but... Just kidding. Enjoyed this one very much Susan, the dual voices of the conscience speaking within itself. Fantastico... You must have drug out one of your favorite tools and scared him off.... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I love the way this poem reads like two seperate poems when one disregards the italics the bold stands on its own as a seperate poem...quite lovely  |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Absolutely stunning, Susan. Take care.........Sue I am in motion |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all for your kind replies. They are much appreciated, and yes, Barry -- Choice -- hmmmmm, where have I heard that before???  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks James - smiling at you Susan |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
You are very creative. I enjoyed what I understood and even what I didn't. - Haze |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
WOW! This was a masterpiece in my book! It was such a beautiful, enchanting, haunting piece of perfection. I reveled in the completeness of this poem. It wasn't missing a thing. Warm regards, Kevo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
two voices one woman such a quandry perhaps a mirror will be the salvation? enjoyed this art ms |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wonderful Susan! Much enjoyed. Chris "At one glance |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Smiling at you all and thanking you for your replies. SusanDark- I've many voices  Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes, very nice indeed! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes! Exactly! ~ and you have conveyed this scenario so very well! Sometimes it is the softest voice that is the strongest ~ and the most alluring! Linda |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
oh yes very very good  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very clever creation i d pick the flight on the wind, over the sane voice anyday |
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