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cliche (falling into raindrops)
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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falling down is so cliche. like rain, and tears, and better days... and i can't find a way to say that i'm past blue and falling into raindrops. that nights are cold, and hearts are black, and grasses still aren't green on this side of the track. i can't say that someone died or i've been stabbed right here again... and i can't tell you where i've been 'cause it has all been felt before. everyone's a failure in a world of statistics where you and me are just the same and it's cliche... falling into raindrops. Poems are made by fools like me, But only God can make a tree. Joyce kilmer |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
One thing for certain, your writing is not cliche'. This aches. To state the cliche', time heals all wounds-- though the scars may linger. I love the concept of "falling into raindrops". Well written.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do like the way you take ordinary and turn it inside out. A good write, this! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"that i'm past blue and falling into raindrops." this was really a cool read  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And I think you are a pretty special poetess and there is nothing cliche' about that. For you are unique, one of a kind... and that is a good thing... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I couldn't agree with you more hugs you |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
GG, Wish I could say something really cool and wise, but hey,I'm just me. I feel your poem very deeply. Your poem is on my "must have" list. I suppose I'm at that point in time that things are cliche and I'm all written out. But, there's still a lot around to discover! Just waiting for something to click with my pen! Good luck to you, Alyssa. Cathy |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alyssa~ I think I'm gonna call you unique ... never, ever cliche~  A heartfelt penning ... you always manage to touch~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
everyone's a failure in a world of statistics Nice to see you and read you again, your pen gives me chills and your voice rings out...loud and clear...good infostructure within these words...solid and forthright... Your writes glow with great fire.... |
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Lady Of Light Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 31 |
Your voice is strong in this piece. I enjoyed, thank you. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 Hi, Alyssa. Hope you are well. Your poetry keeps getting better and better....you've been very blessed with a gift for expressing things so well. Sorry, I'm just now getting around to posting. I've got a special job I've been working on this past week and it will tie me up a few more days, but I'm going to try and get in here a little here and there. Take care, sweetie pie..... love ya, jo |
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Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
This was incredible...I haven't read much of your work...but that will all change after reading this wonderful poem...it screams of talent and creativity. Great job |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh, I have missed you Alyssa this is a song . . . listen . . . and i can't find a way to say that i'm past blue and falling into raindrops. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Alyssa, So are you saying you're a cynic? Naw, you wouldn't say that! And SEA is right, again: "that i'm past blue and falling into raindrops." is a really cool line! Nicely done sweet friend, nicely done.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed....James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Everyone... I'm sorry I've taken this long to reply to you all. It's definitely not before I don't appreciate your replies! I do... more then you know Susan, what a great compliment! Thank you. It's so hard not to write now and say the same things everyone else has said before. I've gotta admit, though, all I've ever seen time do is cover wounds up with a layer thick enough that not to be seen but thin enough still so it tears open and shows that it has rotted everything beneath. Maybe some things, though... eventually. Again, thank you Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Sunshine, Thank you! though its strange to think I did that by talking about how the ordinary is to talk about the ordinary (I'm really not all too creative, lol). Your reply means a lot to me!SEA, I've spent a few too many days walking bone-soaked in the rain, letting my tears slip into the it all. I'm glad you liked this thank you.Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Magnus, your words always mean so much to me. These ones were definitely no exception. Thank you so much for your kidness dear sir Dix,  I figured... hugsAlways, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy, Just you? I beg your pardon! Don't ever say that again! Your writing is always unique with a certain misc'e edge that I love, you'll always be able to find new things to say and ways to say them. And in turn, that'll bring me to do the same Thank you and good luck to you, too!Marge, weird, strange, or slightly awkward are much more accurate descriptions and you know it! You always reply with such care, thank you Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
LeeJ, thank you much, I wish that I could be here more and read you more, too. Seems I'm just gone or out of time, all the time, lately. Your reply is so very reassuring, thank you for that! Means more then you know...Lady of light, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
jo, you're sorry for being slow? lol here I am weeks later replying. Things are just crazy I tell ya! I'm honored you think I'm blessed with an ability to express things well. Though I must admit I find it hard to believe... I think I'm just blessed with great people to express things to! Thank you so much for your words. You take care, too. Love ya... Darker, Thank you for those great compliments! I'm not around nearly as much as I'd like to be, but I want a chance to get to read some of your work, too. I'll bet it's great! Again thank you very much...Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
littlewing, I've missed you, too!!! It's so good to see you here again and such an honor for you to reply so kindly to my writing. Thank you Sue.Larry, me? a cynic? never (I would say it, that is! But if the shoe fits... lol)! I'm glad you liked it! It's always good to hear from you Take care...James, good! I'm glad thank you.Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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