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Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
Hey, this is another song I wrote for my old band...check it out and let me know what you think... Lost I'm looking through my telescope Staring at the past Examining the memory Of when I saw you last And as I sit observing This old moment spent with you My eyes can't help but focus on The things I didn't do: I never told you how I felt I didn't hold on tight And now you're just another star That's lost inside the night Oh...Oh no You're lost inside the darkness Yeah, you're lost and so am I Just looking through my telescope As you go drifting by Oh...Oh no I miss you I need you I love you I lost you Oh...oh no...lost I"m looking through my telescope Searching deep inside Examining this old regret I've tried so hard to hide: If second chances don't exist Why did I let you go? You could have been my everything But now I'll never know 'Cause there's no way to start again No way to make things right And now you're just another star That's lost inside the night Oh...Oh no You're lost inside the darkness Yeah, you're lost and so am I Just looking through my telescope As you go drifting by Oh...Oh no I miss you I need you I love you I lost you Oh...oh no...lost Oh no...you're lost inside the night |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"And as I sit observing This old moment spent with you My eyes can't help but focus on The things I didn't do: I never told you how I felt I didn't hold on tight And now you're just another star That's lost inside the night" I may as well have copied the entire song...I loved it...  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I"m looking through my telescope Searching deep inside Examining this old regret I've tried so hard to hide: If second chances don't exist Why did I let you go? You could have been my everything But now I'll never know 'Cause there's no way to start again No way to make things right And now you're just another star That's lost inside the night So much said here. A wonderful write. Enjoyed this much. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
kwel, very much enjoyed this...would love to hear it to real music. Wonderful write |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
works for me enjoyed -glider- |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
'lost inside the night'---what a great line! This is so smooth and filled with emotion. I love it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
Thank you for your kind comments...I greatly appreciate it! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"And now you're just another star That's lost inside the night" that is going to stick in my mind all day now and that's how it should be, if the message and the music are in synch, in harmony with reality I really really like this one; simple, straightforward, gets the message across.  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
very nicely done!Corinne |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I love every single line and phrase. Wish I could hear this one sung because it's just so beautiful. Awesome job... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like it! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes very good i liked it lots |
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Annie Shadow Junior Member
since 2004-05-02
Posts 27Drifting |
Nice work |
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