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Open Poetry #33

haiku?

Krawdad
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0 posted 2004-08-25 01:09 AM

                         Lines of birds perching
                         as power pole ellipses
                         ad infinitum

Midnitesun

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Gaia

1 posted 2004-08-25 01:11 AM

Very nice! this is one of my favorite poetic forms. Yes, ad infinitum.

Sunshine

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2 posted 2004-08-25 06:58 AM

Excellent Haiku, you!

ice
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3 posted 2004-08-25 07:05 AM

Excellent, a picture of continuation, life going on and on in the great ellipse...
enjoyed
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Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-08-25 07:37 AM

Life is amazing, as you have portrayed here...wonderul write

Cpat Hair

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5 posted 2004-08-25 08:30 AM

ah.. yes I agree with the sunshine one.. excellent...

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-08-25 01:00 PM

Pilgrimage
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7 posted 2004-08-25 02:48 PM

I enjoyed this one. There's always so much more to a haiku than 17 syllables should be able to tell.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Martie

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8 posted 2004-08-25 03:00 PM

Krawdad

Just so, well done!

Susan
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9 posted 2004-08-25 08:17 PM

Haiku! Bless you

Much enjoyed.

Susan

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MGROVES

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10 posted 2004-08-26 09:00 AM

nice

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