Wherein Lie The Casualties

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Open Poetry #33

Wherein Lie The Casualties

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

0 posted 2004-08-20 04:16 PM

Wherein Lie The Casualties

When was that we learned to swallow
pride like a nasty rumor
and cast aside all hope like wishes
when did our differences
     become as irreconcilable as death
or your fabrications sit
much more smoothly than the fact

I tried to cloak our love
blanketing it with passion
     in a clever disguise for affection
confessing my sins to you
as you shed your vestments
     but even you
could not grant me absolution

I slowly watched life (love) unravel
like bandages
as we hid our lies
behind gossamer veils of gentility
     until even those lines (lies) were crossed
and in the end
we waged war against each other
     and truth became the first causality

I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-08-21 06:28 PM

Great write, Hoot. The flow of the words is impressive.

....jo

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2004-08-22 04:58 AM

As only you could write it
WOW!
You words are entransing

Take care, sweet poetesss
Liz

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2004-08-22 07:04 PM

Ruth

"we waged war against each other
and truth became the first causality"

I see much of truth in this poem...so sad how we humans hurt eachother!

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

4 posted 2004-08-22 08:32 PM

hoot,
"Grace under pressure" comes to mind when I read this almost analytical rendering of romance gone wrong. Wonderful write.
Doc

msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

5 posted 2004-08-23 10:14 AM

I admire the form and neatness of your poem.

(and the content)

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2004-08-27 03:26 PM

It so often is. *S*

Beautifully written, dear lady! *S*

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2004-08-31 12:14 PM

Nice writing...James

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