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Jupiter Smiles
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Jupiter Smiles |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I’m swinging on dreams tilting the earth dipping her hems in the dark pooling universe sending ripples through the starshine to you and I'll dance between the lines avoiding the folds in time and send Saturn in spin just to make Jupiter smile his gravity pulling me in centering me here waiting for you to clearly see the view. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Now you know this one had me from the get-go! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dawn, this rocks ya know! Love it. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
jupiter smiles.. and now so do I... nicely done ma'am |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey You, you rocked me with this one TinkleBott  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
muted...maybe, but very clearly heard in this lovely piece. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dawn~ Gal, I simply love the all over quiet beauty of this piece~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
What can i say ... loved it .loved it..loved it... needs to be framed but i will add to my library instead  It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"and I'll dance between the lines avoiding the folds in time and send Saturn in spin just to make Jupiter smile" Loved it, loved it....muted cuted one! Pretty potent stuff....yep.....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
! With such a panoramic view the sights are nothing short of spectacular. Celestially charged. I think I have a new favorite. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Soleil Noir: oh, i know you hang about the heavens with a nickname like that *wink*..thank you for enjoying Donna: oh my! thank you miss...thank you sooo much *hugs* Cpat: see, you have a lovely smile....and i like seeing it shine *smiling back at you* Maree: oh cuddlebutt...LOL...i like that you like this *hug* Krishankins: thank you for being here and reading Marge: you had a lovely picture of jupiter once on a poem of yours....imagine that big ol' planet grinning from ear to ear! Lina: oh how sweet..you very charming lina...stop misbehaving LOL Jo: i so enjoy the names you give me LOL..thank you *hugging you* Dixie: thank you for the sweet reply ~K~: you always flatter me..thank you for bringing a smile to Dawn's face Jupiter grins at all you....and so do I! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
at the risk of being totally unoriginal and offering a totally uninspiring response...wow |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I love the way you fold into the ctracks of time and create wonder. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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