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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-08-18 10:49 AM

Upon the moon's chalked smile
you would come,
as it staggered in sheepishly,
half dressed,
on the new morning sky;

faint in tone at first,
i'd grasp faithfully in dawn's dark,
as i reached knowingly
surely you would bring to me
at least one other song,

but the window, like the gardens
empty, a bit of darnkess lingers
longer, thru the decention of stars;

and i soothe myself
arranging autumns leaves on barren sidewalks,
brushing portraits of dreamlovers
that have yet to reveal themselves,

and when i grow complacent
and lay dormant and doubtful
momentarily, retreating from illusions
of everlasting love,

for no reason,
or premonition of thought;

it happens;

you tap my shoulder
in familiar voice, and remind
that you were never really
far away from me at all.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-08-18 10:52 AM

this is precious and brings such a smile to my heart...

Your words enveloping not only the man your in love with, but also, the heart of every reader....and if not, then indeed a wakening...smiles and hugs...good day to you

Pell
Member

since 2001-09-16

Posts 134
Pacific NW

2 posted 2004-08-18 12:01 PM

Upon the moon's chalked smile
you would come,
as it staggered in sheepishly,
half dressed,
on the new morning sky;

This imagery made me smile

Such a sweet write, enjoyed much.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-08-18 12:30 PM

love that ending

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

4 posted 2004-08-18 07:32 PM

What is this thing you have for autumn.....the last couple have been dealing with the same topic. Expand your horizons. Love ya anyway

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2004-08-19 07:33 AM

thanks guys:

bboy youre just cranky cause you don't get any.......... (autumn colored leaves..lol)

love ya too babyblue

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

6 posted 2004-08-19 06:27 PM

I get plenty and I dont miss the falling leaves. Too much work raking and cleaning up. You can have it! I'll enjoy the sunshine, heat and humidity....

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2004-08-19 09:47 PM

Inky
Excellent poetry... taking the reader by the hand down a grey mood trail, and then whats hoped would happen does, the room fills with light at the end...
enjoyed
---------ice
><>

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

8 posted 2004-08-19 09:52 PM

*sigh* said with the tenderness of love that takes one into lovers dreams...I love it...

PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

9 posted 2004-09-13 10:33 AM

Your good friends are never far away at all and always within reach...

Glad to see it end on the positive note!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

10 posted 2004-09-13 11:34 AM

thanks for bringing this back

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2004-09-13 02:20 PM

now THIS is definately my most favorite of yours...
Incredible oh Inkedgoddess!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2004-09-13 02:43 PM

Excellent write Michele!
I'm so pleased this was brought back up as I was away when you posted this lovely...
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

13 posted 2004-09-13 05:34 PM

My God I love this!

It is so rich and full
of pictures, sights and sounds . . .

I was there, painting . . .

The ending really made me smile, Michele
What a beautiful poetess, you are.

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