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Fire, Earth, Water, Air, and a Vijay Day
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Fire, Earth, Water, Air, and a Vijay Day |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Fire, Earth, Water, Air, and a Vijay Day To find one’s self in churned, soft mixtures for noise will be what it is, as all above will carry one forward Fire, Earth, Water, Air. So long live life, I decree to air, without water, no blood will run, fire will ash, earth will dust and one will be, beyond repair. Such are thoughts that live within me; time and click are much too much ~ so find I shadows that will embrace me and I? Encompass Oh Such Touch! Listen to the chirp of redbird, clicking chirp outside my ledge earth, and water, and air are hers, no need of fire for her to hedge.  Yet all around me I feel the signs of varied windows in this universe for as I talk to my own mind I find rhyme of soul, yet unrehearsed. I do not mean to rhyme myself, my meter is such, it’s beyond repair, and yet with lesser thought I give, these words would seem, indeed, despair. All I know is what I see, in shade and in such light, are shadows that would, and will me keep ~ I will try new things in hopeful ways that would make an average human weep. For here is edge of verse, and I? With no one to stay me away, I found a vision in a dream, as Vijay stood his day, I watched things I do not normally see, Because some friends are so rare; I thought I would enlighten my own way, Because some geese rode upon the air; So watch, did I, a game of play, of Kings and common Men compared; One would think I entered a realm Of gilt, silver, gold, and Ra. Shadows of swift light were long, sun stood within one’s eyes it seemed to me the waters ran though lightning filled no skies and mine own thoughts flickered here, and there, to yesterday and beyond and I, in song of game well played learned of desires in yet a new way. Fire, Earth, Water, Air… All sustain with no compare. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
KJ, you write free verse better than most I know....and you are right, your meter has a little way to go yet... Loved this one, and yes...it was a Vijay day, wasn't it....I missed it...toiling under the house....my wife moved the dog house......under the house now....so, I had to move my computer and run an extension cord outside and under the house... Just kidding!!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Such are thoughts that live within me; time and click are much too much ~ so find I shadows that will embrace me and I? Encompass Oh Such Touch!" You are a sunshine soul for sure! This was glorious, Karilea! Loved every word!  ....jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the real despair would be if you did not write... rhyme schmime... WRITE WRITE WRITE  and hey.... sometimes??? ... ... rhyme happends. you do just fine....  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
 You never cease to amaze me. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful piece |
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Fagin Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 126Ca |
Very nice, Sis this be liking me a whole bunch!! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow i was just thinking about these, and how important. very intersting writing thanks |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
No matter what you write ~ or the form in which you may choose to write it ~ you have my rapt attention! Your words always sing to my soul.  May your day reflect the beauty of your soul! Linda  |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Sunshine, a great write, much enjoyed. Sincerely Rick |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
All I know is what I see, in shade and in such light, are shadows that would, and will me keep ~ I will try new things in hopeful ways that would make an average human weep. Beautiful Karilea!! love this. hugs, Chrislane "At one glance |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
BRAVO!!!! I can see your arms raised to the sky as you chant these amazing words...Absolutely stunning in the emotion that flows from your pen....I love it... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Beautiful Karilea, and what a gorgeous graphic! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Yet all around me I feel the signs of varied windows in this universe for as I talk to my own mind I find rhyme of soul, yet unrehearsed. This poem was georgeous...thank you for sharing |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Masterful. Eric |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea There is so much positive energy in this...it sings! |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
I enjoy the way you expand on 'elemental' aspects here... I absorb more with repeated reading, and that I like very much. Who or what is "Vijay", may I ask? |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Among the inabilities expressed, Within your writing so bedecked and dressed, Are thoughts you can't say 'thout we be impressed As sun and joy pour freely from your breast. Always a pleasure to read you, Sunshine (I was also glad to read of Vijay's triumph, I like to see the glory spread around.) Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Unfortunately, in my world of golf there is more water than earth!!  This is wonderful writing, sunshine. In a land where Tigers rule and Love wins much of the time, it's nice to see the super nice guys land on top on occasion... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Shadows of swift light were long, sun stood within one’s eyes it seemed to me the waters ran though lightning filled no skies and mine own thoughts flickered here, and there, to yesterday and beyond and I, in song of game well played learned of desires in yet a new way. Fire, Earth, Water, Air… All sustain with no compare. How can this be topped? Enjoyed very much. Poor rhyme in that first verse, Shadows of swift lift,--I beg to differ!!! Love it. |
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