Open Poetry #33 |
In Darkness You Walk... |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The fluff of you, so inviting to one’s eye as a brief cough awakens me. Tears have fallen endlessly through my waking fears and slumbering dreams. Lions dance and prowl the lamb in their counter-clockwise stalk of ravaged earth....as silence speaks the lamb. Oh, but to put the hesitance of a step in it’s rightful place, that I might walk swiftly on the morrow’s dawn. For the lead of me binds my shoes to the weathered steps. I can not walk away again.... For I must be the roaring lion of soul and meek eyes of the lamb that will stand and brace as the lion’s roar rises steadily to a scream, one as never you have heard....ever before.... And darkness comes over all that waits. The lion pants and the lamb sleeps briefly the eye before the last howl deafens my heart’s raging beat as my lungs scream in silence, never heard....never seen...and waters lap my fearful thirst...once more. [This message has been edited by Magnus (08-15-2004 11:37 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling man, dear man, oh how this echoes in the places within. I’m awed by this, truly awed, and left speechless For once in my life I’m struck dumb, there’s nothing but wow in my vast vocabulary that can convey the powerful way this speaks to me as always Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, That's quite a thirst. Good write enjoyed. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Wow. This poem packs an emotional whallop. So many excellent lines, each carrying their own weight. And the images it stirs in my mind are crisp. Well done. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
powerful |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
wow, going back to read it again...couldn't leave without telling you I enjoyed it. This one makes you ponder, and ponder. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I can feel the scream in this, BJ. This leaves me pondering mysteries of the times we live in, the lion and the lamb. *hugs* ...jo |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
WOW!!! ABSOLUTELY STUNNING!!! I am speechless.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very powerful write Barry, very well done |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
I enjoy your roars as much as your whispers. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
barry, this is excellent writing... what a profound read |
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