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Bee Sting
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Bee Sting |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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Bee Sting You’re like a bee, He said with a smile You fly in, sip nectar, Then buzz you’re gone I am? I replied Are you sure that’s me? I thought I’m more A butterfly, flying On gossamer wings Lightly laying my presence Across your soul gently My wings wafting the Warm scent of my Restless soul You’re definitely a bee Soft and small Flitting, ceaselessly flying From heart to heart Never pausing long Yet leaving a trace Some part of you Behind Not a moth? They’re pretty, aren’t they? Pretty, but stupid You’re not a moth I can’t see you being Too blindly stupid to fly Into flames over and again Blundering losing themselves In the search for light When the night is Free and clear of pain You’re a bee But bees sting! I don’t sting, do I? Yes bees’ sting So do you, I’ve seen you Leave your sting In some poor soul So he’ll always remember Your passing Feel you like an ache A wound he’ll wear Until time heals He’ll know you always Remember you until Ice freezes his mind And blood no longer Flows in his heart You’re a bee, he said Its your honey men seek He’s right I’m a bee Marsha Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha Excellent write, a play on to bee or not to bee Enjoyed |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Ouch! I bet your sting hurts. Though it sounds like an enjoyable pain...  --------ice ><> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 ...and you're a BEE-u-ti-ful poet as well. Love the new photo, m'friend. And this poem? Well, all I can say is that it beelongs to you, and you wear it well! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Superbly done, MS Bee.....or Ms Wench, whichever is appropriate for that moment... Yes, a bee...most certainly....and more!! |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Heehee I have to say this. If you are a bee and sting I'll slap a little mud on you to ease the pain. Then I'll pull out the ole stinger with a needle. Now back to serious. A very good write. Hugs BonBon  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, a good sting! (but look out for a moth's flame ) |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I like this. A Bee. Interesting comparison. It works well. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty neat write  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
So he’ll always remember Your passing Feel you like an ache A wound he’ll wear Until time heals terrific descriptions, Marsha... enjoyed with a smile~~  M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
ROFLMAO... You are a wicked, wicked wench! LOL AND... a terrific poet... This is a complete delight! *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Marsha, this was cute! I enjoyed the two separate voices very much. ....jo |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FriendieGirl~ You'd have to already know I LOVE IT ! You have us all a'buzz~ You cutie you~~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I don't know...I would say butterfly...what is the purpose of a butterfly...James |
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