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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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Perfect words don’t exist. Have you ever pondered this? The fact There’s not just one To tell the whole Of night, Moon so full Of itself, And bright, But not a star. It cannot grant your wishes Or save the fishes that float When too many irons stoke The fires in seaport boats Meant to nourish hunger Instead of greed. I need One word to express my thoughts. Could it be, The world is hot? No, that’s three too many. See what I mean? I’d like to see a word that’s lean, Not flabby with embellishment To convey my true sentiment. I think somewhere, Sometime, There was a word That did define The restlessness of Hearts yearning In ways that we’re no longer learning. Perhaps, too many words we know. And words today are all for show. Neanderthal might have known. But the word I hunt with club and stone Left with him, and can’t be found. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
hunger, dont ask me but that popped in my head, must be hungry,  my restless heart is hungry for love,the feel of desire,the taste of passion . or longing, good write LMAO sorry  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
MGROVES, I thought this would draw in some humor but was surprised it happened with the first post. Actually, hunger is a good word but it still doesn't get it all. The poem is mostly BS, just playing. In the Indonesian language there is a word for which there is no English equivalent. The word is "cocok" (hope I spelled it right, pronounced chochoke) -- the closest meaning in our language is "harmonious" but that does not encompass the spiritual essence that accompanies the Indonesian word. For me, that word, cocok was a perfect word which I came to understand the meaning of when I lived there for a short time. That's what brought on my pondering (just in case you were curious...) Thanks for your post. And...you'd better feed your need. lol  ....jo |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i like it when one line runs one thought into another. and, i like cocok  |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Yep, I've pondered it too. Great minds think alike, right?  Well, there's nothing else to do when I can't sleep... and it really does seem like there should be a perfect word. In reading your poem I couldn't get the idea of The Lost Chord, out of my head. Of course, now I'll have that hymn stuck in my head all night. Maybe, The Lord Word, though Love reading you... Take care! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a mind! awesome write! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thanks for explaining. love to learn not hungery any more. very good writing,and interesting thanks |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I believe the words exist On this I must insist Or else my words lack meaning And no one will be gleaning What I wish to say When entering in word play. Yes I know Words come and go And some can pile them high With words that are but a lie Or there are those the stumble When speaking mumble So you really don’t know what they say And they probably want it that way Because if not Their words won’t be forgot And they’d be understood Which wouldn’t be good For the humble and shy, But I’m not that sort of guy I want to find the right word I want to be heard It’s just my way. There are those letters that blend Words like “you’re my friend” And I think They should never be extinct. Gloom |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I enjoyed your tumbling thoughts ~ but they certainly weren't jumbled! You non-sensically made lots of sense! ~ and in this world, that is not at all common! lol  Loveulotzuknow! Linda  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the words are ours and we do the best we can to describe for others to be enlightened by and you girl, do an incredible job, painting imagry for us all to savor. Good one! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
iliana All true and a beautiful write. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah...to have that word at our disposal |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
even the "perfect" word or words are often misinterpreted... enjoyed M |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
enjoyed this Jo....nicely put! I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Makes alot of sense....well thought out gal |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
jo, this is beyond good. Wow, and wow again. wise and thoughtful and a great concept. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Jo, You know I can relate to this, being the heavily weighted right brainer that I am. Words are difficult for me to understand, as well as to produce with clarity. They get me into trouble a lot, as other think their meanings are as clear as H20. I'm having trouble with my computer at work. I hope this comes off ok. cathy |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
AH! One word. I think not. To many to capture your imagination, the light within your soul and the song singing within your heart. From The Dictionary BonBon LOL  |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Serendipitous...KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Technology and the efficiency of how we reap, sowing very little is somewhat scary to me....for what does our future hold for us? IF we continue to drive recklessly down Nature's highway. You said it perfectly...Thank you Jo. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes perfect words do exist...when they are the words we wanted to hear...James |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
Liked this part: There was a word That did define The restlessness of Hearts yearning In ways that we’re no longer learning. I agree with muted- love the way you flow one thought into the next, spiraling like a...a...um... slinky... Wonder what a Neanderthal would make of that? Clever write |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LIFE  that 'bout sums it up for me |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I believe that is just the beauty of poetry; we always seek out to discover pieces of everything and though an all-encompassing word like that may be fossil now, there are so many beautiful children of a word that is encased in amber throughout this beautiful world that we find in the hearts of children, the breath of a lover, the majestic flight of a butterfly, etc. (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I’d like to see a word that’s lean, Not flabby with embellishment To convey my true sentiment. ~*~ Sigh. Ok. I'll put my poems on a diet.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is absolutely terrific iliana. It's a pleasure to read you. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 and to all you kind poets. This was 100% mused....and special note to Sunshine, no please don't change anything about the way you write. I really am much too wordy myself sometimes but agree with comments above, especially Noah's, about the children of the first word. I would not ever want to suggest that anyone change their style. This was simply a musing. |
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