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Phantom Needs
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I need to win the lottery So I can concentrate on poetry, I’ll move out to the country And leave the dank city And perhaps write things pretty. But the dollars are just tossed away, I only lose if I even play And end up with a poorer day And in this dismal trap I stay. I need a new night light My old burns not bright As age dims sight. I need a new vase The old has fallen from its place Maybe by a casual pass Turned to just shattered glass. These are just phantom needs Going to nowhere where wishing leads Gloom |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hey Gloom, its good to have dreams and they do come true...a great read thanks a bunch for writing and sharing.  Good morning |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, after I'm completely awake, I'll tell you what my first reaction was today when seeing the word "phantom." But I can tell you now, I really liked that straight-shooting ending. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
C'mon beggar...let's ride our horses... because I find myself wishing for a lot, too.  |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Professor, your poetry is like a light - revealing things that you see - and so often you offer the roses that perhaps once belonged in your broken vase - for all of us to take a sniff- hope you have a nice day |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Alls one need do is believe in their dreams, sometimes it may seem like their a long time coming, but they can come true.  Very well done Proff. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you all For taking the time to read and respond Gloom |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
"These are just phantom needs Going to nowhere where wishing leads" Aren't goals phantom needs? One needs goals... I never could understand my grandmother's familiar quotation which Sunshine alluded to: "If wishes were horses, beggars could ride." I always wondered why everyone couldn't ride. I second Sunshine's motion, "Ride, Professor, ride!" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ah, but sir, you see....you are still writing. Wonderful and don't we all wish?!  ....jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
great writing, glad i stopped |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Gloom "I need to win the lottery So I can concentrate on poetry, I’ll move out to the country And leave the dank city And perhaps write things pretty." Me too! I think we all wish for something magic to sweep us away to a better place...when what we maybe should do, is find the poetry in the pretty where we are. Not always easy to do. Enjoyed your poem! |
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