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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-08-10 05:17 PM

Malleable

A single tear
the wet of fear
a stain on cheek
of could not speak
to tell, to share
the heartache's hold
a single tear,
her drop of gold.

Tomorrow's his
a wish of hers
illusions fit
of mind, deters
a shaken time
though shared in rhyme
a single tear
of want, sincere.

To suffocate
in fluctuate
a mood in sync
of worded ink
to tell, to share
the heartache's hold
a single tear,
her drop of gold.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (08-10-2004 06:54 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-08-10 06:26 PM

This rather
trickles
down
the
p
a
g
e

doesn't it?

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-08-10 06:57 PM

Yes, and it needed a correction, too...glad I checked back

M ( I am having keyboard troubles again...I have to pound the keys to get each letter..but "what they hey" it gets rid of my frustrations.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2004-08-10 08:22 PM

I know a moth divine who is gonna be all over the rhyme scheme of this'n.

You are packing a powerful muse these days!

*wow*

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2004-08-10 10:59 PM

It won't be the first or the last tear to fall,
which isn't a very comforting thought, I know.

Better days are what we make of them I guess...
and I'm all out of kleenex.
Enjoyed reading this so much Maureen.
Hugs to you girl friend~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-08-11 03:51 AM

Yes, I would say, that this is....a drop of pure gold! Love your writing, Maureen......*hugs*......jo

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-08-11 04:39 AM

gawd!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2004-08-11 05:13 AM

Oh, me! Oh, my!
I wanna cry!
The words you've told,
Are of pure gold!

EA

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

8 posted 2004-08-11 05:26 AM

this does have a great flow...beautiful cadence...

beautiful you Maureen

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

9 posted 2004-08-11 06:26 AM

how beautifully written and felt...

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

10 posted 2004-08-15 06:44 AM

This one stuck in my head when I read it...
but didn't have a chance then to reply,
so forgive my lateness

This right is perfect in words, rhyme, and rhythm. How precious that tear is....
Beautiful, M

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

11 posted 2004-08-15 10:07 AM

The thought of tears as being malleable, like gold...

Only a poet/alchemist can image that, and transfer it and stick it on a page as words...I am glad you are a poet and that I had the chance to read this....
enjoyed
--------ice
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