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iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

0 posted 2004-08-09 02:43 AM

Rings of smoke circled high
Above Fred’s pipe and wise-browed eyes.
Time stood still as I’d watched O’s rise
And float along a summer sky,
Then slowly fade and blend to clear.
Fascination held my stare
Until another would appear.
My knees propped up, my chin to rest,
Fred told me tales at my request.
I watched the circles tracing lines
Of patterned clouds I memorized.
Ah, it pleases me seeing these
Simple scenes, now memories,
When I learned from him some simple pleasures:
Watching smoke rings; watching weather;
Listening to his Thelma’s humming
To raisin oatmeals in her oven.
Then quietly rocking an old cane chair
A child of five, I, found peace there.
The scents and sounds of love were near
As I watched smoke float in sunset’s fare.

[This message has been edited by iliana (08-09-2004 03:47 AM).]

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2004-08-09 03:14 AM

Delightful childhood memories and a real warm feel to this piece......Nicely done!

Eric

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2004-08-09 07:17 AM

lily, that was an absolutely captivating read! A myriad of emotions coursed through me as I read down the page.

Warm hugs for a very warm write!

Linda

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-08-09 07:30 AM

When I learned from him some simple pleasures:
Watching smoke rings; watching weather;
Listening to his Thelma’s humming
To raisin oatmeals in her oven.
Then quietly rocking an old cane chair
A child of five, I, found peace there.

Jo, this was extremely profound...thank you for taking me by the hand and viewing your thoughts...

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2004-08-09 07:39 AM

Jo, this is a remarkably shared piece of memory, I could see the scene and more than that remembered myself watching those smoke rings my stepfather made ... there was something mystical in watching them rise and dissolve ....
Wonderful write.
Love and hugs. Margherita

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2004-08-09 07:52 AM

iliana
"Watching smoke rings; watching weather;"
Don't we all.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

6 posted 2004-08-09 10:08 AM

Mmmm, yes, the simple joys of a child that we should all remember to practice as adults. I too loved to hear the stories as a child. A lovely picture you've drawn with your words, dearest jo.

susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-08-09 12:14 PM

comforting ...yes

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

8 posted 2004-08-09 01:05 PM

Ah...to turn back the clocks of time and really pay attention this time through to the memories so wisely bestowed to us by those we once thought old

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

9 posted 2004-08-09 03:54 PM

Beautiful sweet memories never die
but live on within us.

Beautiful poem Jo.

:-)

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2004-08-09 08:05 PM

I'm a sucker for storytellers, so when I come across a storyteller telling tales of storytellers, it's a double treat for me!

Thanks jo!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

11 posted 2004-08-09 08:46 PM

What a wonderful vision you present...is different from my post, and every bit as charming a view. Loved your presentation very much Jo.
TD

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